Soprts and social activities are considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Nowadys, many colleeges and universities are caring about sports and social life. Some people believe that schools should spend money just on acadamic classes, while other might disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that colleeges should spend money as much as they spend on classes abd libraries. I feel that way for two reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, sports and social activities help student to relief their stress. Students spend too much time at lectures, classes, book store and exams. So, they always streesed about their scores. My own experience is a compalling example to illustarte that, when I was at university I used to spend like ten hours every day between lectures and studying at library with my friends. In fact, I and my colleagues felt so exhausted and stressed because of that. Moreover, there was not any source of sports or any social life to get us involoved together during the educational period. On the other hand, when our university decided to join the international competion of succor ball we became so excited. I and my friends joined our colleege's sports team . So, we became so happy that our school spent more money on sports. Furthermore, we got involved at many social activities during the sports seasons. consequently, we would able to forgot about our stress. As a result, we became so happy and had a strong relationship together. In addition, we got very high score by the end of the year. As you can see, this experience taught me that university should spend more on sports and social activities.
In addition, sports help students to keep themselves healthy. Nowadays we can watch many health programs at television talk about how to keep yourself healthy. These programs states that students should spend more time practice exercises everyday. For instance, my brother he is ten year old. He used to live in his dorm the whole year. There is no sort of sports or games at his college. So, there is no chance for him to practice any sports like swimming or succor ball. As a result, he became obese and he is suffering from high blood pressure. On the other hand , my cousin is living in other country. He states that his university spent like two million dollars last two years to build swimming pool for students. Hw would able to join the swimming team. Furthermore, the colleege there gave him chance to walk like one hour everyday. Consegquently, he became so healthy man and he never compelen from any health issue. This experience is agood way to learn us that universities should spent money on sports to save student's health.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that universities and colleeges have to give a good finincial support to sports and social activities as lectures and libraries. This is because sports help students to relieve stress, and because sports provide students with a good health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 385, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'classes'' or 'classis's'?
Suggestion: classes'; classis's
...ld spend money as much as they spend on classes abd libraries. I feel that way for two ...
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Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...friends joined our colleeges sports team . So, we became so happy that our school ...
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Line 3, column 908, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequently
...l activities during the sports seasons. consequently, we would able to forgot about our stre...
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Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ould spend more time practice exercises everyday. For instance, my brother he is ten yea...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...m high blood pressure. On the other hand , my cousin is living in other country. H...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...e gave him chance to walk like one hour everyday. Consegquently, he became so healthy ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, sort of, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2502.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88671875 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6197204228 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486328125 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3344007117 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.4857142857 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6285714286 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.97142857143 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181389879541 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449775991684 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490177392507 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12673169262 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360824343243 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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