Sports and social activities are considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Nowadays, many colleges and universities are caring about sports and social life. Some people believe that schools should spend money just on academic classes, while other might disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that colleges should spend money as much as they spend on classes and libraries. I feel that way for two reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, sports and social activities help student to relief their stress. Students spend too much time at lectures, classes, book store and exams. So, they always stressed about their scores. My own experience is compelling example to illustrate that, when I was at university I used to spend like ten hours every day between lectures and studying at library with my friends. In fact, I and my colleagues felt so exhausted and stressed because of that. Moreover, there was not any source of sports or any social life to get us involved together during the educational period. On the other hand, when our university decided to join the international competition of succor ball we became so excited. I and my friends joined our college's sports team. So, we became so happy that our school spent more money on sports. Furthermore, we got involved at many social activities during the sports seasons. Consequently, we would able to forget about our stress. As a result, we became so happy and had a strong relationship together. In addition, we got very high score by the end of the year. As you can see, this experience taught me that university should spend more on sports and social activities.
In addition, sports help students to keep themselves healthy. Nowadays we can watch many health programs at television talk about how to keep yourself healthy. These programs state that students should spend more time practice exercises every day. For instance, my brother he is ten year old. He used to live in his dorm the whole year. There is no sort of sports or games at his college. So, there is no chance for him to practice any sports like swimming or succor ball. As a result, he became obese and he is suffering from high blood pressure. On the other hand, my cousin is living in other country. He states that his university spent like two million dollars last two years to build swimming pool for students. He would able to join the swimming team. Furthermore, the college there gave him chance to walk like one hour every day. Consequently, he became so healthy man and he never complains from any health issue. This experience is good way to teach us that universities should spent money on sports to save student's health.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that universities and colleges have to give a good financial support to sports and social activities as lectures and libraries. This is because sports help students to relieve stress, and because sports provide students with a good health.
- TOEFL T P O 34 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r 70
- TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-21 - Integrated Writing Task Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, g 73
- TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task 75
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, sort of, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2498.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8693957115 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58357781387 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465886939571 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1479488031 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.3714285714 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6571428571 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.97142857143 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18559073991 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470520912787 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053192793386 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134005174444 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430947090385 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.