TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is no doubt that friendship is one of the most important matters in life. Some belive that holding your old friends is more important than making new ones, while others hold the view that it is essential to make new friends even with casual aquaintances. I tend to look at both sides and give my idea.

on the one hand, usually old friends are close friends as a result of broad familiarity and correlation. Not only they are much more dependable, but also you have more mutual memories with them that calminate to stronger friendship. Consequently, you are better to keep your old friends inspite of possible chalenges you may face during your friendship. For instance, although I had a lot of contentions with my oldest friend who we know each other for 12 years, we try to neglect the the faults and keep our friendship. Many years later, despite of losing the chance to meet new individuals, I will have had a friend who has compensated the lack of sister in my life.

On the other hand, some assert that you should concentrate on making new friends, however you keep old ones. Aside from new opportunities that are made by new people, it enhaces your skills for communication and as a result, it raises your air of confidence. For instance, by making lots of friends at university, I gained some vital experiences about how to cope with problems that would not have been possible otherwise. Furthermore, as you make new friends, it is possible to meet a person who you fall in love with. I can mention my brothr in this case who got married to her college sweetheart.

In a nutshell, I prefer to keep my old friends rather than make new friend becuase from my point of view, having a person beyond your family who you can trust on in your life is more valuable than getting new experiences.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: On
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...h other for 12 years, we try to neglect the the faults and keep our friendship. Many ye...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...h other for 12 years, we try to neglect the the faults and keep our friendship. Many ye...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, while, for instance, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60681114551 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64234548598 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538699690402 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0487830817 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.285714286 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325899416348 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117222368164 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909497138791 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229080624304 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243330794709 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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