TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Liu Chang on Thu, 12/07/2017 - 04:35

In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. The reading passage proposes several methods to solve the problem of declining frog populations. However, the lecture holds a different view that none of these methods are practical to solve the problems.|
First of all, the reading passage says that frogs are being harmed by pesticides, and if laws prohibited the farmers from using harming pesticides near sensitive frog populations, it would significantly reduce the harm pesticides cause to frogs. The lecture refutes the idea completely. The pesticides are used to kill the pests which threat the ecosystem. If farmers do follow the regulations and stop using pesticides, they will suffer great crop losses, and the ecosystem will lose balance.|
What's more, the reading passage points out that a second major factor in frog population decline is a fungus which causes thickening of the frogs' skin.So we human should apply treatments that kill the fungus with heat to frogs on a large scale.But the lecture argues that the treatment would be applied individually which would be complicated and expensive.|
Last but not least, the reading passage claims that key water habitats were better protected from excessive water use and development, many frog species would recover. But the lecture challenges the view by stating the major cause to the decline of their natural habitats is global warming.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 60, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eading passage says that frogs are being harmed by pesticides, and if laws prohib...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... and the ecosystem will lose balance.| Whats more, the reading passage points out th...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...ich causes thickening of the frogs skin.So we human should apply treatments that ...
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Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the frogs skin.So we human should apply treatments that kill the fungus with hea...
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Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...gus with heat to frogs on a large scale.But the lecture argues that the treatment w...
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Line 3, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... treatment would be applied individually which would be complicated and expensive...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 239.0 407.700716846 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24267782427 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63599654642 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598326359833 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 209.19739726 48.9658058833 427% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 179.0 100.406767564 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.1428571429 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0197000954327 0.236089414692 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00494252552337 0.076458572812 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0121066655729 0.0737576698707 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0110171823689 0.150856017488 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110770465009 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 11.7677419355 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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