Personal enjoyment is crucial for people lives and health. It is the only way to help people to reduce stress, enjoy life. Although some people, if asked, would say that people today have limited or no time at all for personal enjoyment, I think that due to technology advancement people, nowaday's, have more time to enjoy their time. The basis for my views is because the advance in computer and machines.
There is no doubt that computers are the best innovations in humankind history last decades. Computers give us easy access to the digital era. With the help of computer, people can save tremendous time for other activities. For example, students can utilize computer to search for subject, study, or shop online. Without computers students could spend more time searching for books at the library or shopping at shopping mall.
In addition, transportation developing significantly reduce commuting time. In the past, people use to use animals as a sole way of transportation. People used to spend days or monthes to travel from one point to another. However, with engine machine discovery, cars, trains and airplane are far way faster and convenient. As a result, people have spare time to spend on their personal enjoyment. For example, because my vacation time is limited, I can use airplane to travel to Cuba to enjoy the beach with my family. If airplanes were not invented, I would not able to enjoy my personal time.
Admittedly, People in the past were also had some personal time. Life in the past was not fast and stressful as it is today. Even though that they did not suffer from mental stress as we are in today's life, the lack of the technology add more physical stress on their bodies. For instance, they used their hand to plant and cultivate crops. Thus, this required time and physical effort. However, machines replace human with those tasks. People can use machines to colloect crops in faster and effective way than it used to be before. Therefore, they have more time to enjoy their time.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that with continuous development in technology represented in computer and machines, people will have more time to enjoy their time more than ever. therefore, I agree that people nowaday's spending more time on their personal enjoyment that those in the past.
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Essay evaluation report
for people lives and health.
for people's lives and health.
Sentence: People used to spend days or monthes to travel from one point to another.
Error: monthes Suggestion: months
Sentence: People can use machines to colloect crops in faster and effective way than it used to be before.
Error: colloect Suggestion: collect
flaws:
The essay is off the topic. It is not compared to the past, but 'the things they should do'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? in 30
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1865 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.746 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.72 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.185 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.56 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.465 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...uce commuting time. In the past, people use to use animals as a sole way of transpo...
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Line 9, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ime to enjoy their time more than ever. therefore, I agree that people nowadays spending ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in addition', 'no doubt', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.279642058166 0.229887763892 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.13870246085 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.082774049217 0.0866891130778 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0380313199105 0.046263068375 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0536912751678 0.0685040099705 78% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127516778523 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0201342281879 0.0351676179071 57% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56958654769 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0447427293065 0.0309702414327 144% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0581655480984 0.0887237588012 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0201342281879 0.0209618222197 96% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00223713646532 0.0139019557991 16% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2324.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 393.0 408.028673835 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.91348600509 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.333333333333 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249363867684 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188295165394 0.174417080927 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.104325699746 0.112833075102 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56958654769 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491094147583 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 53.1143419325 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.1153846154 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9220579387 48.84282405 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3846153846 120.699889404 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1153846154 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.461538461538 0.644075263715 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 40.0517713838 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.85436893204 1.45489161554 127% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252982448047 0.300154397459 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112565576966 0.103427244359 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0859002701993 0.0752933317313 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.445790333049 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147857138632 0.151897553556 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929667999732 0.114077575197 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456008746167 0.0781384742642 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.363167112917 0.336927656856 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0899651203525 0.067059652881 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172392470226 0.210909579961 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463218825999 0.0618886996521 75% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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