Enjoyment is vital in everybody life as it eases stress and hold refreshing. Peoples need to have a time alone or with friends. However now a days most of us didn't enjoy at all. This is because there are things to do first in our life even though we now it is helpful. I believe we are doing what we need to do rather than doing what we like to do.
First of all peoples are busy by life circumstances for example with work, education and similar others. for this reason they couldn't get time for personal enjoyment. A research done on a aged people who told they will dying soon compiling a good example. They were asked that what did they regrate in their life, and they mostly answered that I regrate the most that I didn't work what I really want, I didn't enjoy with my family and friends.
In addition of shortage of time, they have financial problems for living. These days it seems that we are living to pay our bills, because we work and we pay all, noting will left for enjoyment. My personal experience will a good example of this. Even if i know i have to take a time to be happy, and I saved some money hardly something unexpected happend and I will use it to that unexpected thing.
Finally it comes to be family issue. specially if they have a children it will be difficult even to think about it. Most of the time the parents feel responsible for children and instade of take a time for enjoyment they will sacrifiey them selves for them. In our culture we used to have extended family type.
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- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 60
- TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems 83
- TPO-04 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...e a time alone or with friends. However now a days most of us didnt enjoy at all. This is ...
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Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... friends. However now a days most of us didnt enjoy at all. This is because there are...
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Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ith work, education and similar others. for this reason they couldnt get time for p...
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Line 2, column 126, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...nd similar others. for this reason they couldnt get time for personal enjoyment. A rese...
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Line 2, column 186, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... personal enjoyment. A research done on a aged people who told they will dying so...
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Line 2, column 219, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'die', 'dye'
Suggestion: die; dye
...one on a aged people who told they will dying soon compiling a good example. They wer...
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Line 2, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...answered that I regrate the most that I didnt work what I really want, I didnt enjoy ...
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Line 2, column 403, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...that I didnt work what I really want, I didnt enjoy with my family and friends. In...
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Line 2, column 443, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...didnt enjoy with my family and friends. In addition of shortage of time, they ha...
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Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...enjoy with my family and friends. In addition of shortage of time, they have financia...
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Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'leave'
Suggestion: leave
...use we work and we pay all, noting will left for enjoyment. My personal experience w...
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Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ce will a good example of this. Even if i know i have to take a time to be happy,...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... will use it to that unexpected thing. Finally it comes to be family issue. specially ...
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Line 4, column 37, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Specially
.... Finally it comes to be family issue. specially if they have a children it will be diff...
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Line 4, column 60, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...be family issue. specially if they have a children it will be difficult even to think abou...
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Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: THEM_SELVES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
... time for enjoyment they will sacrifiey them selves for them. In our culture we used to hav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, really, so, for example, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1225.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31338028169 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30182334168 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521126760563 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1468756729 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0588235294 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7058823529 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244675461353 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728728136545 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776489556611 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147376240029 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107279137546 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.42 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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