The majority of people who are in their early to mid-twenties think that in the past that people’s grandparents were children, people’s life was easier and more comfortable than today. They support that today’s fast-paced world requires people with a number of knowledge. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should not be thought about in a different light. I believe that people’s life today is easier and more comfortable because they are able to utilize today’s advanced technology and build international relationship.
First of all, today’s advanced technology enables people to get a lot of information. To be specific, they are able to experience a number of things would not be in the past, which as a results better understand other cultures, lifestyle. As modern society is becoming increasing, today’s globalized world provides people to enjoy a better quality of life. People can do this better by various technologies. For example, our family has six members with my grandparents. Sometimes my grandmother advice me to experience a lot of things what today’s world provides us such as the Internet. When she was a child, she wanted to be professor. For this, a wide range of knowledge is required to obtain. However, at that time, the information what she wanted was rare to obtain from libraries. This is because in order to enter libraries, she had to pay substantial pay to them. Today people are easy to get a lot of information from the Internet. Thus, I learned that people’s life today is easier and more comfortable because they are able to take advantage of advanced technology.
Moreover, today’s life is easy to build international relationship with others. In addition, globalized world create opportunities to meet with people all around world without connection, which as a result allows people to learn how to build relationship through communicating their thoughts and connecting with other’s feelings. Building relationships not only is a great way to develop the increasingly important social, interpersonal, communication skills but also provides the basis for a strong network necessary in leading a successful life. To illustrate, a study done by the New York Times, it revealed that people today are more likely to feel happy and more comfortable than in the past. The study indicated that 80 percent of 200 Korean people over 70 years old agree with this research. This was because in the past it was difficult to do international business with all over the world and their scope was limited within their country. It was obvious that they lost their opportunities to expand their business and collect benefit. However, people today are easier to connect with people who live different countries and make a business with them. Thus, it is legitimate to say that today’s life is easier and more comfortable because people nowadays are able to broaden their perspectives.
To sum up, I believe that people’s life in the past was not easier and more comfortable than nowadays because they could not utilize today’s advanced technology and broaden their perspectives. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[5]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
...s fast-paced world requires people with a number of knowledge. However, the notion does not reflect t...
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Line 2, column 189, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...ings would not be in the past, which as a results better understand other cultures, lifes...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236842105263 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.156346749226 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100619195046 0.0866891130778 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0433436532508 0.046263068375 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0557275541796 0.0685040099705 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111455108359 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0201238390093 0.0351676179071 57% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.15013133114 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0433436532508 0.0309702414327 140% => OK
Particles: 0.0015479876161 0.00188951952338 82% => OK
Determiners: 0.0665634674923 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00928792569659 0.0209618222197 44% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0123839009288 0.0139019557991 89% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3349.0 2387.08602151 140% => OK
No of words: 537.0 408.028673835 132% => OK
Chars per words: 6.2364990689 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372439478585 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.277467411546 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.2104283054 0.174417080927 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.163873370577 0.112833075102 145% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15013133114 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454376163873 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.1727142935 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6684587814 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8888888889 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1454386922 48.84282405 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.037037037 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.644075263715 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 47.6356300435 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.44242424242 1.45489161554 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281850470984 0.300154397459 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120866842408 0.103427244359 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101789077789 0.0752933317313 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.458598729389 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141685167236 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106050115498 0.114077575197 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593500626939 0.0781384742642 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.460714169624 0.336927656856 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0230356358526 0.067059652881 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216543986683 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385837484598 0.0618886996521 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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