One of the most significant invention of 20 th century is mass media. Undisputed, which of them television has increadibly effects for not only children also adults, which catchs up young children for many ways. I can not say whole tv programs are unuseful for young children, however, television advertising guided young children (aged two to five) should not be permit. I totally agree this idea for several reasons that ı will state the following sentences.
To begin with, children approach advertising for fun which is so colorful to impact them. Young children could watch these advertising for minutes without distinction. These adds should sell one product and to get succeed for this they should produce slogans and messages which imply that if you bouhgt this product, you would get happier. For instance, my little cousen third years, when he go shopping with his family what he have seen in add, wants to buy it. However, family is not rich that causes really big problems.
Another reason why agree with the above statement is that these advertisings do not allow to childers for manufacturing however they make children to believe that the more comsuming the more being happy. Contrary, real life is not this. Noone cab be happy without work or to achieve success which are the major thing to be human.
Third but not least, Advertising cuts into going on program which makes children to loose their attention. Morever, they lead to prevent something from concentrating that cause important problems in their future.
İn conclusion, I utterly believe that television advertising souuld not permit for young chindren sucs as aged two to four is a valid argument. The aged of two to four is a time for children what they see, hear that they could recieve so easily, causes unbelievebable problems in their future. Adds are not benifit but also destructive.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
...the most significant invention of 20 th century is mass media. Undisputed, which of the...
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Line 2, column 392, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
..., my little cousen third years, when he go shopping with his family what he have s...
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Line 2, column 428, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
... he go shopping with his family what he have seen in add, wants to buy it. However, ...
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Line 4, column 85, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...oing on program which makes children to loose their attention. Morever, they lead to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, third, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01602564103 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58747163289 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608974358974 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7342254462 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0588235294 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3529411765 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221311679928 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679593323107 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067325308564 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12327582095 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571673504599 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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