Technology has made huge impacts on our lives from generations to generations. Children nowadays spend a lot of time on electronic productions, considering they are necessaries. Thus, some parents concern that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past as the result of overplaying electronic devices. However, it’s not completely true to say that technology affects children’s creativity in a negative way.
The reasons are as followed.
To begin with, technology provides more opportunities for children to assess the information. Creativity doesn’t come from nowhere as it is based on extensive knowledge and profound comprehension. Technology broaden children’s horizon by demonstrating brilliant achievements accomplished by our priors. For example, last Friday I took my little sister to the science museum to witness the experiment of Faraday Cage. She was completely attracted by the magic of science. That was when she started to learn electricity in school; hence, she made a presentation on both what she had learned from the experiment and her own idea of the electricity. Therefore, children are gaining more valuable information than what parents think their children can gat form the technology.
Moreover, children who are fond of technology could become geniuses on technology. When people are talking technology, they are more likely talking about the computer and internet. Computers we are using today is the creation of all the programmers. They work day and night coding, testing and maintaining the system. I would say that programming is another way to create while most parents consider only a physical creation matters. What’s more, robot are prevalent these days. Some amazing robots are made by children who are interested in both programming and engineering. The development of technology has exceeded the conventional knowledge of most people due to the increasing number of talent on technology.
Last, there is another voice saying that children only use electronic devices like iPad to play games in regardless of the good initial intention of parents to educate children. I kind of agree with this point. Some games are fun but meaningless. Nevertheless, there are some games requiring the creation of players, like the series of Angry Bird. In that game, players have to figure out the optimal way associated with perfect angle and appropriate strength to break down the defense. That, to be frankly, asking for the ability of analyzing and creating. Creation of children could be improved from good games requiring different ability.
To wrap up, just because technology helps children to develop their creation in a way that is not in line with the traditional way doesn’t mean it makes children less creativity.
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Essay evaluation report
Children nowadays spend a lot of time on electronic productions, considering they are necessaries.
Description: 'they' refers to 'Children' or 'productions'? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
Thus, some parents concern that technology has made children less creative...
Description: 'concern' is a transitive verb, not 'concern that ...'
Sentence: I kind of agree with this point.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to I and kind
Sentence: Therefore, children are gaining more valuable information than what parents think their children can gat form the technology.
Error: gat Suggestion: get ???
flaws:
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.679 21.0 //sentences are short
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2286 1500
No. of Different Words: 244 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.207 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.889 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.679 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.026 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.464 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.254 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.436 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...logy affects children's creativity in a negative way. The reasons are as followed. To b...
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Line 4, column 762, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...at parents think their children can gat form the technology. Moreover, children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, frankly, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, kind of, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45766590389 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08233993984 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560640732265 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4392227687 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1785714286 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6071428571 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196471770945 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510589908991 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532458117252 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108539060539 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550218088969 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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