In contemporary society, much ink has been spilled about professional change, and some claims that athletes and celebrities that are from the entertainment business can change their careers to be politicians. Such assertion, however, is torn to pieces by others. As far as I am concerned, the statement that people with no previous political background could change their professional career to politicians is arbitrary and one-sided because it fails to take all the related circumstances into consideration. We should analyze this statement comprehensively before we draw the eventual conclusion.
To begin with, athletes and celebrities are prone to lack higher education. These people usually started their training at a very early age. Their priorities go to the professional training like sport for athletes and acting for celebrities. Not so much time is left to study. Few of them have been to college. Politicians nowadays are well-educated. The education background on their resume is fascination. For example, the previous secretary of state, Hillary, graduated from Yale, majoring in law. People tend to believe those politicians with fancy education background are able to give them a direction with bright future. When it comes to vote, people is more likely to vote for the educated candidates rather than athletes and celebrities.
Second, athletes and celebrities are not able to make the decision that will benefit the whole country. Athletes and celebrities are not able to see the big picture because of the limitation of their background, so they probably cannot figure out a way that is inclusive and beneficial. For example, some celebrities deliberately create attractive news to help them remain popular, regardless of the impact the news will have on the society. Politicians are supposed to be the role model of the people so that people are willing to be represented by politicians.
Admittedly, athletes and celebrities have more exposure under the spot. They have a lot more attention than the politicians. Their fans commit to follow them forever. However, it is a different story when it comes to politics, as a tiny little change of political policies affect people’s daily life significantly. Popularity doesn’t assure people will support athletes and celebrities as politicians. If they cannot prove their capability to lead people, no one will back them up regarding important decisions.
In brief, based on the previous discussion, the issue whether athletes and celebrities could become politicians or not is complex and needs a case by case analysis. We are not supposed to disregards those situations where the statement is unjustifiable. As a result, I can not totally agree with this statement.
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Essay evaluation report
In contemporary society,
In a contemporary society,
In the contemporary society,
and some claims that athletes and celebrities
and some claim that athletes and celebrities
The education background on their resume is fascination.
The education background on their resume is fascinating.
people is more likely to vote for the educated candidates rather than athletes and celebrities.
people are more likely to vote for the educated candidates rather than athletes and celebrities.
We are not supposed to disregards those situations
We are not supposed to disregard those situations
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short. Look:
Not so much time is left to study.
Few of them have been to college.
Politicians nowadays are well-educated.
The education background on their resume is fascination.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 432 350
No. of Characters: 2251 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.559 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.211 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.977 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.349 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.443 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, regarding, second, so, well, for example, in brief, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40371229698 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12891461092 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526682134571 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.8002707782 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2592592593 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.962962963 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270251590972 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663010898437 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688046099887 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151129152333 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523881174438 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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