Recent evolution in technology affects our lives in many aspects. It has noticeable effects in the adult and the children to a similar extent. some people argue that these technology hider youth creativity. Personally, I totally agree with this opinion for the following reasons.
Firstly, children, nowadays, spend most of their time playing video games instead of doing something beneficial.moreover, they become less interested in the other activities like drawing, learning how to play music or even participating in summer fairs. thus, these new generations are labeled as lazy ones and lack the basic measures of creativity. For instance, during the past youth tend to use their imagination in order to invent new games, besides, they liked to break down some of their game to explore how does it manufacture, then they rebuild them again, they were more curious and like to know reasons behind everything and that what made them really smart. Actually, that generation is the same one who invents the technological tools that we enjoy today. For Example, one of my cousins used to play with lego on he was a child, it is a game constitute of small pieces that connected together in order to construct different shapes, he was in love with this game and tend to make cars with different unique shapes, today, after he grows up his passion for cars never stop, he continues his education in the same field and now he is the head manager to one of the most popular cars companies that own multiple factories around the world. personally, I believe that this kind of children games enhances their creativity.
Secondly, even though we cannot ignore the advantages of new inventions that made our lives much easier than before, we cannot also refute the fact that these recent technologies make the children inpatient. Furthermore, one of the essential parameters of ingenuity is to be patient. Thus, the person can continue in his trial until he achieves what he wants. For instance, my little sister who studies at primary school had a project about DNA structure for a biology fair. At the start, she was really motivated and enthusiastic about the project. She made a lot of researches on the internet and I took her to nearby store to buy all the materials she needs, then she made a primary plan on her iPad which she enjoyed very much and found it very easy, but, when she started to build the real structure she found it very difficult and only after 2 trials she gave up and became frustrated. I was surprised because she liked the work at the beginning. So, I talked to her and explain that all the genius inventions did not see the light after the first attempt, thus, she needs to put more effort to finish her work. Fortunately, she regained her energy and began to work again; and finally, when I attended her biology fair I was able to see the proudness in her eyes, especially when she won the school award for the best project. this emphasizes the fact that technology can have a negative impact on the youth.
in conclusion, there is no doubt that the technology that surrounded us has many beneficial effects, However, it also can yeild in decreasing the child creativity due to many reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2668.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80720720721 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6479584809 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 837.9 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.591517001 48.9658058833 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.047619048 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116812001635 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321950235422 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342211893619 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749518742337 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369170331267 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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