Technology can connect people without limitation of time and distance from each other. One of the most important issue in technology is its affects on people and also children. Creativity of children is very important for families and they are looking for finding a great way to promote this ability in children. In my opinion, technology made children less creative than were in the past. I have two reasons for this opinion which I will mention in the reminder of this essay.
First, I think that technology will make children to have creativity in limited areas. when children play with different toys they use creativity for playing with them and this will enhance creativity in children, but when they are playing computer games, instead of aggresive behaviour, they just limit their creativity in game area and this would suppress creativity power in children. For instance, when I was a child, I used to play soccer with my neighborhood children. We used different equipment for creating soccer field which was very intersting and also creative.
Second, technology will make children dependant. Technology is very addictive and children in their earlier age have this tension to depend on something. Technology is very surprising for children and opens new world for them. Creativity often comes by dealing with different things and equipment. After a period of time children will addict to technology and this will destroy creativity of children. For example, online marketing made everything avalible for people and they are not eager to fix broken things.
In conclusion, I think that technology made children less creative because it restrics the creativity of children and also technology has negative affects on children creativity by addicting them. These two reason will suppress children creativity. I hope that someday, families will make plans for their children to take advantage of using technology for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26860841424 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72101512191 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485436893204 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.9403250543 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4444444444 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239096148414 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987394593407 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743045720954 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181246262389 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251044419347 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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