We are living in modern society with the assistance of technology, which provides people with many convenient things. Understanding this phenomenon, people enjoy and appreciate the inventions of technologies. However, some people question that whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. In my point of view, I completely oppose this statement for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, technology helps to make children to be smarter. As far as I am concerned, there are more things, which are created by children than ever before. In my country, Vietnam we have many programs made by children, such as a group of children collaborate to create the game called "who is the more intelligent". Moreover, we all know that to use the technology is not easy. Therefore, children have to learn to find methods to use them. By doing so will make children more active. My nephew is a compelling example of this case. Last year I bought a computer for him in order to support his studies. He loves to discover and learn new things. Thus, whenever he has time he work on computer. Six months ago, he received a big award from a program online because he designed a style of table. It looks nice and convenient to use.
Secondly, technology support children in their studies and learn new things effectively. Compared to the past, some decades ago, there were few people knew to use computers, just only people worked on office were familiar with the computers. However, today most people know how to use computers expertly. Computers allow children to get information in a matter of seconds. They can learn to type fast and use many programs on computers. For example, nowadays most classes require students to present their lessons or do exam by Power Point. It is an excellent way to convey ideas to others by sound, words and pictures. It helps to make lessons more vibrant and colorful.
In conclusion, people have different ideas about the issue whether technology makes children less creative. In my opinion, for two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I totally support the notion that children are smarter and more creative thanks to the invention of technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94722955145 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74891746427 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551451187335 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9697014059 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1153846154 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5769230769 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222107773754 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572080464034 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588939353675 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138166059586 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305784686613 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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