As the technology advances, its impacts in our life is getting stronger. There are several aspects that are inevitable to avoid. one of those is gaming, computer games have gained a great popularity in recent years, however there are various and opposing reactions to the popularity of the games especially among children. There are enough number of people who do think that playing computer game is a waste of time. I strongly believe that children should be allowed to play computer games. I support playing computer games because of two main reasons that are explained detailed in the passages below. First of all, computer games can play a role in the development of children and secondly, playing computer games is a good way to spend spare time as it helps children to avoid bad habits.
One of the positive impacts of playing computer is the role it plays in the development of children. According to the recent research of Azerbaijani Neurologist Association, playing visual games improve creativity and innovative thinking. Creativity and innovative thinking are important features in order to succeed in any field, thus through playing computer games, children can acquire those skills since early ages. Beside these, as there are some games which require decision making, it can help children to improve their decision making, to learn how to make decisions independently. It would help children to stay on their own feet better in the future. Apart from these, there are some intellectual computer games which are especially dedicated to children. There are various types of games according to each age group. For example, my nephew who is 3 years old, he learned the names of animals and the places where they usually live through the computer games.
The second reason, why I assume that computer games does not cause to the waste of time, on the contrary, it causes children to avoid bad habits. For example, when we were child, we did not have an internet, at least, not many people knew about it, I remember my friends complaining about having less activities to do, except playing football which made us tired after playing for a while, as some of them already fed up with it, they used various methods to make their lives more excited and some of them gained bad habits such as smoking, stealing, teasing, they assumed that it gave them an excitement and freshness. However, nowadays, children try to play computer games when they have time, it helps them to satisfy with their free time activities alongside with helping to avoid bad habits.
All in all, it is important to note that playing computer games is not a waste of time, in contrast, children can benefit from playing computer games, as it can contribute to their self-development and to avoid harmful activities to make their free time more interesting and exciting.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
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Line 5, column 297, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun activities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ber my friends complaining about having less activities to do, except playing footba...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, apart from, at least, for example, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9769874477 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58167557144 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479079497908 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.2425392051 48.9658058833 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.210526316 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1578947368 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3189916852 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115383141123 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841470005184 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213989013455 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642368503369 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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