Our new era has been engaged to the paramount role of the computer and it is not far-fetched its proliferated influence on the new generation brings up growing controversial doubts whether it has advantageous impacts on this delicate part of our society or not. Personally, I must admit that I ponder this engagement is inevitable and our children should get involved in this new technological revolution. However, we should take into the account that this invent is like a two-edged sword, so our offspring require being lead thoroughly for not getting the victims of its pernicious state. The ensuing paragraphs the rationale behind this opinion will be elaborate.
first and for most, the fast-paste reliance of our affairs to technologies especially computer is undeniable and our children as the supreme part of upcoming' developments should not being apart from its benefits. rationally, they need to collaborate with this revolutionary progresses. As the matter of fact, the educational system ought to provide the situations to enlighten both parents and children to perceive how to use it as beneficially as it is feasible. As an illustration, there are profound computer programs which nurture our youth's creativity and assist them to focus accurately. The statistic shows that 25 percent of the child below age six in United state are suffering from a deficiency on their brain which is called AHD; it causes the weakness of concentration and consequently the brain damage. And an absolute cure is the rudimentary computer games like the snake game. As you see, the management of its potentials will engender outstanding outcomes, not admonish it illogically.
On the other hand, no one can cast the shadow of the detrimental aspect of uncontrolled usage and the fact is such damages are uncompromising and need to get solid consideration. Some conductive points are the limitation of their physical activities and its non-surprising consequences like the High blood pressure, early Diabetes type 2, and so forth. Besides, it exterminates their social skills to make actual friends. They get reluctant to their surroundings and refuse to communicate as a fellow of a community. They overlook the true world and tend to be merged into their games. Admittedly, an antisocial character is the outcome of this harmful phenomenon which will bring up the abundance of social disasters and catastrophic future for them.
In brief, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that our children as the principal segment of the coming time should get proper training about all the necessary equipment and technologies like the computer. Nevertheless, the burden of the supervision is on their parents and school instructors' shoulders.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, apart from, in brief, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30979498861 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1544871159 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576309794989 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1928571793 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.684210526 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10284537004 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303673027883 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297758286798 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0638354423448 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327240034716 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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