As technology and electronic devices such as computers develop, we witness lots of people especially children spend most of the time to play games. Some people believe this evolution in computer harmful for a human especially teenagers, many other think computer game has many advantages and a good hobby for children. I agree with the idea of the latter group at least for two main reasons elaborated as follows.
For one thing, by spending children's time for computer games, they do not have time to go out of the home and prevent illegal behavior .One of the most important ways which teenager committed a crime is they do not have any entertainment and when they are going to spend more time out of home after that they meet many illegal people and always they encourage teenage to do some illegal work such as robbing. Although sometimes they spend most of the time for playing like a person who addicted to illegal drag, it better to do illegal work. Additionally, parents should create a program to help children to fill their time by doing appropriate work such as playing by the computer, do more exercise and other games.
The second posit impact of playing computer games is improving their mind and the way of thinking. It is clearly tangible that nowadays children who use kind of smartphone, tablet, laptop and other electronic devices especially for playing the game are cleverer than the past children and also have especial talents in many ways. For example, one of my cousins is about ten years old and has good talent in playing games .He always takes first place in all of the lessons such as mathematics, physics and so on, also he tries to solve other student's problem because thinking better and his professor sometimes surprising that how can he solve difficult questions. As a result, playing games help children to the horizon their mind.
To make it brief, as above reasons I mentioned, by providing a situation for children to spend more time for fun in a positive way instead of going out and doing many illegal works .consequently, by more supervising in playing games, children do not get tedious and it can cause to improve the quality of their life.
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...ren do not get tedious and it can cause to improve the quality of their life.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'at least', 'for example', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as a result', 'for one thing']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241379310345 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.162561576355 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.12315270936 0.0866891130778 142% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0443349753695 0.046263068375 96% => OK
Pronouns: 0.051724137931 0.0685040099705 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142857142857 0.118717715034 120% => OK
Participles: 0.0369458128079 0.0351676179071 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5341650825 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0320197044335 0.0309702414327 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0689655172414 0.0887237588012 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00738916256158 0.0209618222197 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.012315270936 0.0139019557991 89% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2190.0 2387.08602151 92% => OK
No of words: 378.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79365079365 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.322751322751 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.267195767196 0.251872472559 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166666666667 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0925925925926 0.112833075102 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5341650825 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507936507937 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 54.9113907346 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6684587814 53% => OK
Sentence length: 34.3636363636 20.5533526081 167% => OK
Sentence length SD: 105.899843529 48.84282405 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.090909091 120.699889404 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3636363636 20.5533526081 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.09090909091 0.644075263715 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 61.0832130832 45.7405998639 134% => OK
Elegance: 1.62857142857 1.45489161554 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321800029705 0.300154397459 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144391987023 0.103427244359 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0969409917587 0.0752933317313 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.633982544123 0.497263757937 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.168139124217 0.151897553556 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163396704135 0.114077575197 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464011145778 0.0781384742642 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.313504525649 0.336927656856 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0128877603372 0.067059652881 19% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223819823484 0.210909579961 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253873776792 0.0618886996521 41% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.