As much as the media technology developed, most of children are exposed to computer games. I believe that playing computer games is a waste of time. These are the following reasons: most of computer games include violent elements, kids are easily poisoned with games. In addition, playing game can affect on player’s health.
To begin with, the subject for the computer games is usually have zappy topics to have users. Because the computer can stimulate only hearing and sight, the game producer prefer to have stimulative component. As an example, the game battle ground is about surviving from the people by killing each other. It can make the kids to think improperly.
Secondly, the children are weak from impulses ;thus, they can be captivated by game. Moreover, the youngsters are not good at self-regulation. In other words, as much as they are young, they need someone who can control them if the kids want to play the game. My older brother, when he eagerly wants to play the computer games, he gets permission form my parents after he did all of his study.
Playing games requires a plenty of time to be done with one match. It can make lack of time to exercise. Sitting long time can cause wrong position which is victim for themselves. To make it obvious, these days, there are lots of researches about association between media revolution and turtleneck syndrome. It proves that playing computer can disadvantage on the health by making the kids to maintain wrong position.
Finally, I think forbidding the computer game for the kids is best way to keep them safe. Differently, I believe that finding the new way to spend time instead of playing the game on computer is better.In conclusion, I think playing computer games is a waste of time and should not be done by children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...much as the media technology developed, most of children are exposed to computer games. I believ...
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Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...th games. In addition, playing game can affect on player's health. To begin with,...
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Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...bject for the computer games is usually have zappy topics to have users. Because the...
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Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
... the computer games, he gets permission form my parents after he did all of his stud...
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Line 9, column 60, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...rbidding the computer game for the kids is best way to keep them safe. Differently, I b...
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Line 9, column 203, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... playing the game on computer is better.In conclusion, I think playing computer ga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87987012987 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62306117108 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3970484151 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1052631579 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262548782203 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901342327207 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859570096657 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163058327378 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713031040974 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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