In my country, it has been increasing to have a nuclear family, which consists of parents and a child, which has led our society to an uncomfortable one. In my opinion, to have extended family should be a good solution of this problem because of following reasons; a preparation for a real society, learning being compassionate.
In a nuclear family, a child tend to be selfish, and parents are apt to let their child do whatever he likes, which makes the child more egoistic. In the real society this kind of person is not accept, furthermore, it is difficult for him to adapt himself to the society. Children have to learn how they should convey their thinking in the society, and the extended family can take this role. For example, the family with members in a variety of ages teaches children that people have different kinds of mindset . Nowadays, school kids tend to hold the same way of thinking as their friends', moreover, they are afraid that they standout by possessing distinct thoughts from others. It is not negative at all to have an specific mindset and/or to discuss that with others who have a different one. There are grandparents, parents, and a child in addition to aunts or uncles in one family, which benefits a kid in this way that I mentioned above.
In an extended family, people can learn the life of a person. It is quite important for us to know how the life goes on because it is usually not close to us on a daily basis. Furthermore, to know the meaning of death teaches us the importance of ourselves and others' lives. Recently, as the nuclear family increases, a tragic event often happens in my country, which is a murder case. According to a research by a team of sociologists, the rate of murders by a younger generations has sky-rocketed, and most of them were raised in a nuclear family, where their both parents work throughout the day, or at least half a day. In a extended family, children can become aware of how importance the person's life is and how they should behave to others who might be weaker than them by observing their grandparents' death or by interacting with other family members like younger cousins.
In conclusion, although it might be challenging to have a big family with varied generations, I believe that it has a great influence on our society for those two reasons above.
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which consists of parents and a child, which has led our society to an uncomfortable one
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a child tend to be selfish
a child tends to be selfish
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