Under the current social circumstances, the issue concerning whether the extended families have been less important than they were before have brought into public focus and triggered all sort of controversies. In my point of view, I agree with this statement due to the reasons below.
Primarily, the far distance between small families makes people have fewer opportunities to see their distant relatives. In contrast to the people in the past who lived with their extended families, the increasing movements of population nowadays have brought to the separation of big families, and thus different families would have their own choice to live in a city that fit them the best. Living far away from their extended families, people tend to care more about themselves rather than treat distant relatives as an important part of their life. For instance, while my mother had her grandparents accompanied her every day when she was young, I am just able to visit my grandparents who live in a province far away from me less than 2 times a year, which definitely means that grandparents do not play and important part in my life than my mum’s.
Second, people don’t need lots of help nor contact from extended families than they used to do. As our country is developing in a positive way, technology exploded not only with various useful inventions like smartphones and internet but also provides us better medical treatment. Therefore, now small families don’t need to think frequently if their extended families live a comfortable life since each family have its ability to live well. This makes extended families less important than they were in the past. Take my parents experience as an example, they just greet their extended families in the Wechat when there are some special events such as a relative’s birthday now, rather than visiting them and preparing presents in the past. Moreover, they rarely need money or advice from us because they could acquire information from the internet.
Last but not least, larger society circle make people live happily without the company of extended relatives. People could meet different kinds of people and make friends with people who have same interests while surfing in the internet or in the society, so it is not necessary of them to stay in an extremely good relationship with their distant relatives in order to gain happiness. My brother Jack, a successful businessman with plenty of opportunities to get to know people all over the world in parties or social events nowadays, seldom communicated with his extended families since he has already had enough friends. So, his distant relatives certainly could not play important roles in his life.
In conclusion, I attribute the decrease of the importance of extended families to far distance, no need for help and more friends around. That’s why I believe that the extended families have less significance now than they used to be.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...sed to do. As our country is developing in a positive way, technology exploded not only with vari...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, sort of, such as, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2486.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11522633745 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75360923146 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524691358025 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 774.0 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.3733897335 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.111111111 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194432322626 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764560036002 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493892891646 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127359191991 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391065289017 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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