There are different views on an extended family. Some argue that extended family is less important at present, while others argue that it is important now and the past. In my opinion, it is better to have a joint family at present. I feel this way for two reasons which will be explored in the following eassy.
First, there are many advantages of having a joint family, Where one can share ideas, thoughts, and can express their feelings. For instance, my sister got married and lives in india with her husband, she was not working, where she feels bore when her husband goes to office because there is no one to share her feelings. As a result, she got depression. Consequently, one should be with a large family so that they can be more happy and can have enjoyment.
Second, in the extended family one can help each other. Now a days both parents are working so they is no sufficient time to look after their children. Furthermore, they get tired once they return from the work. At that time if the children were in the joint family they would be more happy and can stay healthy. Futhermore, kids can gain more knowledge from their grandparents. For instance, when I was a kid I used to sleep with my grand parents, where they used to say different moral stories on each day. As a result, it helped me to face more difficult situations and to become more strong.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that extended families at present are more important because they help children to be more happy and individuals can share their feelings with each other.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
...xtended family one can help each other. Now a days both parents are working so they is no ...
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Line 5, column 61, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ded family one can help each other. Now a days both parents are working so they is no ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...a days both parents are working so they is no sufficient time to look after their ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, second, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1292.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64748201439 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46796146805 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528776978417 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0664440022 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.75 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110436536157 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409097001928 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430486471917 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833067431628 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487918998738 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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