TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Family is an important thing in our life, but nowadays there is some people don’t care about this blessing for many reasons that a will explain in the following essay.

Firstly, expanded family as grandparents, aunts, uncles, are in a lot of situations a great support in many fields, morally and financially.
I always liked how I am entoured by a loving person, plus my parents my grandparents support me when I choose my husband and convict my parent that he is a good man, fortunately he was, besides they give me wedding dresse as a gift, I loved theme and i will, two of my cousins were my roommates in college we studied and took adventures together.

Secondly, it is obvious that this generation is widely different that ours, their values and priorities are not the same, young people think more to theire profit than anything. They leave even their parents in early age looking for a new life and opportunities. And now we can see a younth that they don’t even know their cousins.

In fact the relationship between the person and his extended family depend in my opinion in the way how he was raised and how their parents beehive toward their family so he absorb those values from them.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that the extended family is less important nowadays but, it depend on how this relationships are strong and valuable.

Votes
Average: 6 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing dresse as a gift, I loved theme and i will, two of my cousins were my roommat...
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...ly different that ours, their values and priorities are not the same, young peopl...
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Line 8, column 175, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'absorbs'.
Suggestion: absorbs
...rents beehive toward their family so he absorb those values from them. In conclusio...
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Line 10, column 95, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'depends'?
Suggestion: depends
...mily is less important nowadays but, it depend on how this relationships are strong an...
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Line 10, column 109, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...mportant nowadays but, it depend on how this relationships are strong and valuable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1136.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 237.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79324894515 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6892967033 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62447257384 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.2527602043 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.625 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.375 5.45110844103 227% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118072462919 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561371296321 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037055430661 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0683369505395 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031684341727 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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