Every one has their own preferred way in raising their kids, and all of them have their own strength and weaknesses. I strongly believe that children should be taught to manage their own money at young age, in order to become financially responsible adults. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations goes as follows.
To begin with, managing money at young age enables them to build their personality to appreciate what they have and earn. Children learn mostly when they are young with fresh brains, and everything they learn is stamped in their young minds forever. Eventually, becoming a financially responsible adult is the mission of parents. The more they allow their kids to be open minded to manage confidently their own money, and feel that they are really trusted, the more this will have an advantageous impact on them. As a parent, kids should not be given every thing unconditionally. A child who earns what he gets will take good care of his belongings. However, if a mom gives in and buys all the toys that her baby demands, he will lose the ability to save his money and effort. This have a dreadful consequence of the child's developing personality.
Another reason is that the child who is used to be independent and have the money by himself would be able to make mistakes, and thus learn some managing lessons. The first time that a kid have a big amount of cash in his hands he will spend it either on ice cream or on useless toys. But, each time the kid have the opportunity to posses money, he will learn how and when to spend it. An older child would buy a gift for his mother, for example. Also, being financially responsible motivates them to always work hard in order to stabilize their financial level. This kind of stimulation is the strongest in formulating a strong responsible adult. At the same time, a child who manage their own money would be comfortable for that, thus he would not be greedy or unsatisfied. A young child having money and being able to be strongly responsible for spending it is the biggest accomplishment for the parents.
As a conclusion, a building block in a child's journey in life is teaching him to manage their own money at young age. This produces a strong generation who is able to face all the obstacles and be dependent on himself, and thus a better future for every one.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'go'.
Suggestion: go
...and cons of each side. The explanations goes as follows. To begin with, managing ...
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Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minded managing'.
Suggestion: minded managing
...e more they allow their kids to be open minded to manage confidently their own money, and feel t...
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Line 5, column 710, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hild who manage their own money would be comfortable for that, thus he would not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, thus, for example, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65558194774 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64191111026 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496437054632 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2430956662 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0909090909 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1363636364 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255858802427 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824603708052 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932716239075 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181320458116 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607090498104 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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