Money plays a major role in every individual life because it is basic necessary to live. In my opinion, I agree that with the statement that Children from childhood should learn how to manage the money so that they can know the value of money.
First, parents should teach children how to spend money on useful things. Furthermore, they should also explain to them each and every problem about getting money. They should teach how difficult to earn money rather than giving money to children unnecessary. Even if they are rich, they should not give money. Hence, children will understand the value of the money.
Second, if children know how to spend money everyone in the society can benefit. For instance, daily you can see many advertisements on the television where they mislead the users to buy their products. If children do not know how to spend money they may buy the products unnecessary without thinking about the use of the product and how the advertisers are making money simply. For instance, my sister is very much concerned about the beauty and she used to buy every new product from the market which says she will look more beautiful. Therefore, she wasted a lot of money without using the product fully. Moreover, you can spend money for orphanages, blind people, education, and on small children who do not have money to eat. So that these people can be benefited and it is useful to everyone in the society.
In conclusion, I believe that children at the young age should learn more about spending money in a right way so that they will become financially responsible adults.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... should learn more about spending money in a right way so that they will become financially re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 276.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8115942029 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45182527415 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518115942029 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0164410656 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226294883704 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895849658232 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661903942292 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173253712578 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562246921687 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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