TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s world, everything goes and works with money. it is impossible today to survive in this conflicting world without knowing how to save the money as long as manage it. I am of the opinion that people should teach their children how to control and manage their financial situation, and most importantly become a more financially responsible people for their future lives.
To begin with, parents have to notify their youngsters about the future and the need to make an effort to make a good life. today, children cannot realize the importance and role of the money in their life because parents lavishly provide everything they want. In long term, this could lead to an adult with no understanding of the world around him or her. For this person, it is improbable to say that everything needs an effort and without working hard nothing can be achieved. therefore, parents should stop providing and making their children an imaginary world. they can teach them by assigning some household chores and giving them a reward based on their effort. In this regard, they will be raised organized and responsible for their life.
Another key point is that youngsters have to understand the importance of money investment for their life. In fact, parents can let them know how they run a house financially where it might give them a clue of money management for the future. To illustrate, an example from my own life would bring a prospective to this issue. I am a great business man and know how to manage my work and life both well. Thanks to my father’s lessons, it is now easy to deeply find out that it is not good to put your money on one thing and also I need to save some money for the times I am needy. therefore, financial management plays a critical role in making a young person concerned for the life.
However, parents should not push their children to know some difficult realities about the money and how to manage it. children in certain ages need to just play and live in a peaceful atmosphere because their mind cannot handle hard and complex duties.
All in all, parents have to brighten the horizons of their pupils about the real life as long as making them concerned about the managing their money and becoming a responsible person for the future life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
..., everything goes and works with money. it is impossible today to survive in this ...
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Suggestion: Today
...to make an effort to make a good life. today, children cannot realize the importance...
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...t working hard nothing can be achieved. therefore, parents should stop providing and maki...
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Suggestion: They
...king their children an imaginary world. they can teach them by assigning some househ...
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Suggestion: Therefore
...ve some money for the times I am needy. therefore, financial management plays a critical ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, well, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7375 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5268557537 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4775 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4408284316 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7368421053 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26315789474 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1818410679 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652520841762 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406522393437 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123521136123 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333066482611 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.