Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, I believe that children should learn to manage their own money at young age. I think so for two main reasons which I will detail in the following paragraphs.
First of all, children can know about the worth of the money. This it is something important because they would appreciate the things what they already have and this it is crucial for taking care what they get and being grateful with their parents and close people. Besides, children could obtain the knowledge about the difficulty of deal with money and make effort to get succeed with it own money and will be able to achieve the financial independence when they become adults. In my personal experience, my mother always teach me saving the tips which I receive in order to can afford the objetcs which I would have never bouht if I will not save. As a result, I pay a large amount of money in things what give me a great improvement in the quality life of mine and my family. For this reason, I support the importance of teaching the value of the money in kids.
Secondly, young people need to recognize the real dimension of working to meet the goals which they propose in their life. Although they do not need to work, that is not a motive for disregarding of all the efforts who their parents or closing people do to provide them with food, studies or even leisure. Drawing from my own experience, I remember when I was a child my mother must work a lot to give us our lunch and pays my school and the same with my sister. Moreover, I have not forgotten the big stress when my mother needed to pay the expenditures of my family. Our difficulties for managing money it is in my memory until nowadays, as a consequence I apply that lesson every moment when I could and fortunately, I know the importance of working. It is clearly to see why knowing the effort who someone else put to achieve everything it have it will be significant to appreciate what we have.
In conclusion, I agree with the previous statement. This is because kids must learn onto the heavy responsability on money and its critical relationship with working.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 845, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...meone else put to achieve everything it have it will be significant to appreciate wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55352480418 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56495224497 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9449627132 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227061527495 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843584182766 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877966107323 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172519810106 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079357693322 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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