People can travel with or without a tour guide. Both of this two type of ways have advantages and dis advantages and it depend on people. However, I believe that traveling alone is the best way for traveling because of three main reasons. You can save your money, you met new experiences, and you are free to go every where.
First, you save a lof of money instead of paying it to the tour guide. If you want to travel with a tour, you should spend extra money for your tour guide. You can either save your money by traveling alone or travel many places due to the fact that you have extra money. For example, two years ago I went to the Turkey by myself. I used a book that show me where I stay, where I eat, and where I visit. Because I travel alone, I could travel three cities; on the contrary, If I went with a tour, I could only see only two cities.
Second, you met new experiences If you travel alone. Because of that your tour guide only shows you places that he or she love it or familier whit it. But, I really like to have new experience and see where I want at the moment. For example, two years age on the same trip I had decided to see only Istanbul's streets and cultures. After I went to this city I know that there are a lot of new coffee shops that I really love this kinds of coffee shops and this is very good and new experience for me.
Third, you are free to go everywhere. Your tour guide only show you few places. For instance, I read an anouncement about a tour that they make a detailed plan for this trip. You should spend your time with tour. You should go every wgere they go and see every thing they want to see. They planed for every second of the trip. I really love to have a flexible plane instead of rigid one.
All in all, though many people love to travel by tour and with a tour guide. I strongly believe that If you have a sufficient details about your destination, it is adviced that travel without a tour guide.
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Essay evaluation report
Both of this two type of ways have advantages
Both of ways have advantages
it depend on people.
it depends on people.
a book that show me where I stay
a book that shows me where I stay
love this kinds of coffee shops
love this kind of coffee shops
Your tour guide only show you few places.
Your tour guides only show you few places.
it is adviced that travel without a tour guide.
it is adviced to travel without a tour guide.
Sentence: First, you save a lof of money instead of paying it to the tour guide.
Error: lof Suggestion: lot
Sentence: Because of that your tour guide only shows you places that he or she love it or familier whit it.
Error: familier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For instance, I read an anouncement about a tour that they make a detailed plan for this trip.
Error: anouncement Suggestion: announcement
Sentence: You should go every wgere they go and see every thing they want to see.
Error: wgere Suggestion: were
Sentence: I strongly believe that If you have a sufficient details about your destination, it is adviced that travel without a tour guide.
Error: adviced Suggestion: advised
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Different Words: 150 200 //need to memorize more words
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1526 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.005 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.016 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 72 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 21 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.483 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.218 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'depends'?
Suggestion: depends
...ve advantages and dis advantages and it depend on people. However, I believe that trav...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: EVERY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'everywhere'?
Suggestion: everywhere
...new experiences, and you are free to go every where. First, you save a lof of money instea...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'place'
Suggestion: place
... of that your tour guide only shows you places that he or she love it or familier whit...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loves'.
Suggestion: loves
...de only shows you places that he or she love it or familier whit it. But, I really l...
^^^^
Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... of new coffee shops that I really love this kinds of coffee shops and this is very ...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'for example', 'for instance', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.191037735849 0.229887763892 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.153301886792 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0518867924528 0.0866891130778 60% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0448113207547 0.046263068375 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.132075471698 0.0685040099705 193% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.129716981132 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0141509433962 0.0351676179071 40% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.11165907033 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0283018867925 0.0309702414327 91% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0801886792453 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0188679245283 0.0209618222197 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0141509433962 0.0139019557991 102% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1952.0 2387.08602151 82% => OK
No of words: 381.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12335958005 5.86048508987 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.223097112861 0.338922669872 66% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.11811023622 0.251872472559 47% => More words length more than 6 chars wanted.
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0656167979003 0.174417080927 38% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0446194225722 0.112833075102 40% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.11165907033 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419947506562 0.524397521467 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.6091243617 59.2087087015 74% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 15.875 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9726174075 48.84282405 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3333333333 120.699889404 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.875 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.458333333333 0.644075263715 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 27.686023622 45.7405998639 61% => OK
Elegance: 1.01428571429 1.45489161554 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311728389058 0.300154397459 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104890553249 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0973184537057 0.0752933317313 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.433728262908 0.497263757937 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.127505369462 0.151897553556 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11563833645 0.114077575197 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586530594329 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.332353216559 0.336927656856 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0770566101216 0.067059652881 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218358091484 0.210909579961 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041979668206 0.0618886996521 68% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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