The majority of people who are in their early to mid-twenties think that most products seem much better by their advertisements than they really have. They support that it should be done better than they are in order to increase their sales profit. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be thought in a different light. I believe that most products in advertisements are as the same as they are. This is because the advertisements are involved in companies’ reputation and people are able to find out detailed information from the Internet.
First of all, companies’ reputation is dependent on the truth of their real products. To be specific, companies could attain strong confidence from customers when they truly advertise their products without aggregation. As modern society is becoming increasingly competitive, companies develop their capability with the truth of theirs in order to compete with other rival companies in the world. For example, Steve Jobs, who is the founder of Apple, made great accomplishments in his lifetime. I read online that he was successful business man because he was global minded and culturally sensitive. He did this by making advertisements about their company’s products with truth. This proves that most products in advertisements would not be added with aggregation because the advertisements might make their products to be damaged in their reputation.
Moreover, people are capable to find out detailed information from the Internet, even advertisements make their products seem much better than they really are. In addition, people in modern society are intelligent when they consider purchasing some products what they want. As modern society is becoming increasingly, consumers have experienced and viewed a lot of advertisements which are designed to deceive their consumers. For example, when I was in University, I and my friends have discussed about some products which seem much better by their advertisements. However, we always detect their aggregation through getting a lot of information from the Internet, especially Forum. And all companies have bankrupted without exception as we discussed. Through this experience, I learned that most products in advertisements should be as the same as they are because people are able to find out detailed information from the Internet.
To sum up, I believe that most products should not be made better by their advertisements because the advertisements are involve in companies’ reputation and people are able to find out detailed information from the Internet. All things I have mentioned, it is my belief that my argument regarding this topic has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons.
- TPO-20 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, it had been common practice since the late 1960s no to suppress natural forest fires. The “let it burn” policy assumed that forest fire would burn themselves out quickly, without causing much dama 86
- TPO-15 - Integrated Writing Task The cane toad is a large (1.8 kg) amphibian species native to Central and South America. It was deliberately introduced to Australia in 1935 with the expectation that it would protect farmers' crops by eating harmful insec 86
- TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b 86
- Teachers were more appreciated and valued by the society in the past than today 65
- TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa 86
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
...isements because the advertisements are involve in companies' reputation and peopl...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'for example', 'in addition', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219461697723 0.229887763892 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.184265010352 0.158761421928 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0807453416149 0.0866891130778 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0434782608696 0.046263068375 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0869565217391 0.0685040099705 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.144927536232 0.118717715034 122% => OK
Participles: 0.0434782608696 0.0351676179071 124% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.19458470198 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0227743271222 0.0309702414327 74% => OK
Particles: 0.0103519668737 0.00188951952338 548% => OK
Determiners: 0.0621118012422 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0144927536232 0.0209618222197 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0165631469979 0.0139019557991 119% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2758.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 431.0 408.028673835 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.39907192575 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.394431554524 0.338922669872 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.30162412993 0.251872472559 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.236658932715 0.174417080927 136% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.169373549884 0.112833075102 150% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19458470198 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426914153132 0.524397521467 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.1984445209 59.2087087015 78% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5238095238 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9724962132 48.84282405 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.333333333 120.699889404 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5238095238 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52380952381 0.644075263715 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 50.6862225168 45.7405998639 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.29605263158 1.45489161554 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255225969693 0.300154397459 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.147339031921 0.103427244359 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.116354821477 0.0752933317313 155% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.479934744846 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.132624115141 0.151897553556 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106655025055 0.114077575197 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664123560269 0.0781384742642 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.410931000132 0.336927656856 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0284938594008 0.067059652881 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200846187323 0.210909579961 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382181850306 0.0618886996521 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.