TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

An essential question that everybody might ask himself is "how to become successful in my life?". People may exploit different strategies to succeed in their lives. Some of them try new things and take risks, while others do what they have already learnt from someone else. The crucial question is which strategy is more practical and effective. In my opinion, people that choose first strategy would acheive major successfulness.

Firstly, trying new things would give you a different understanding from that of all the other people's. When you try to explore something new, it means that you experience what other people haven't experienced yet. This increases your chance to succeed and might results in making difference.

Secondly, it is known by the history that the majority of successsful people were very brave. Lots of famous kings, scientists, authors, athletes, etc., were people who changed their way and moved in the opposite direction of their societies. These successful people were able to make changes only by taking risks.

Finally, it seems reasonable that people who takes risks become more creative, since they face with unexpected situations that make them immidiately decide what to do. This impowers their ability of decision making. Although in first steps, they might loose their opportunities, but gradually they become strong enough to face different troubles.

In conclusion, I believe that taking risks not only make people successful but also it protects them in facing with troubles and challanges. The people who try new things would be ready to deal with different complexities and allow them to discover many things that is yet uncovered.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 267.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34831460674 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68495182828 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595505617978 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0652172796 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.25 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6875 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250717446045 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758327010313 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664271556339 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135774961168 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345811637175 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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