The recent years have witnessed a fast development of the society and abundant people become successful in the same time. Along with which comes a heated debate wether successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they already know how to do well. Some people support the idea that great men always challenge themselves and do something special while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, I am totally in favor of the former point of view. My reasons and examples are given below.
Initially, trying new things helps people to have a great understanding of the latest technology. There is no doubt that those who are always curious about the up-to-date information and latest trends have a greater chance to success. The cutting edge technology enhance their progress of success. For instance, one of my friends is the founder of a IT company and always tries new things. Before he started his business, he got a job as a programmer. However, instead of jus focusing on his general works, he spent a lot of time making acquaintance with people from varies professional background. By learning their pain points about the education, he established his company of online education and received an investment of 500 million dollars. When I asked him about his success, he said,'Stay curious and try new things.'
In addition, if people want to be successful, taking risks is the only approach. There is an old saying goes in my country,'You never snatch a wolf with a empty hand.' Let us think it over in reverse, if we can earn a profit without any risks, how can our society has so many occupations? For example, in the old days, adventurers such as Columbus has discover lots of new continents. At that time, taking an adventure at that time took a great deal of risks and lots of brave sailors died because of the raging ocean. What propel these adventurers is that they can obtain valuable treasure and be successful in their countries.
Admittedly, I am not denying that doing what we know how to do well is not important on the way to success. However, as long as we can be finish our current task perfectly and also look forward, there is nothing to worry about and we can absolutely win the competitive edge in the future.
In a nutshell, there are countless reasons that make a person succeed but trying new things and taking risks are always the most important qualities of all. It is not only because they can have better understanding of the latest technology but also because it is the only way to success. Based on what I written above, that it why I feel this way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: a; IT
...ce, one of my friends is the founder of a IT company and always tries new things. Be...
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Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...ne of my friends is the founder of a IT company and always tries new things. Before he ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Stay
...n I asked him about his success, he said,Stay curious and try new things. In additio...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , You
...here is an old saying goes in my country,You never snatch a wolf with a empty hand. ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...my country,You never snatch a wolf with a empty hand. Let us think it over in rev...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'discovered'.
Suggestion: discovered
... days, adventurers such as Columbus has discover lots of new continents. At that time, t...
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...sful in their countries. Admittedly, I am not denying that doing what we know how to do well ...
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Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'wrote'?
Suggestion: wrote
...he only way to success. Based on what I written above, that it why I feel this way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67532467532 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62685323901 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532467532468 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6287766029 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305016595716 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784704124286 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102516724096 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169420071836 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0926040503214 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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