TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Success includes but is not limited to having the chance to enjoy the life and find exciting things. Although some people may consider that only doing the known could bring about the happiness, I still think that for most people, to chase the unknown is a foolproof way to explore and enjoy the happiness.

To begin with, most people couldn't use their already resources to exchange for the success. Most people cannot get enough what they truly wanted. If they just do nothing but what they currently do, the chance to improve the situation is so slim. However, trying new things and taking risks is a chance for them to achieve the dream. For example, one of my friends hope to buy a new computer while he lacks of money. So, he chooses to work in a restaurant. Maybe the job is that he has never considered, and the risks exist like he has less time to study and then the score may suffer, but when he gets the dreamed computer, he can achieve great success that he may never have if he just study for day by day. As this example aptly illustrates, successful people are hardly to give up at the front of the reality or what is already exist. They will challenge the unknown and are willing to take the risks.

Meanwhile, except the successful result, the process to try new things and take risks itself is a great, exciting experience. Take my own experience as an example. I took the test for driving license not a long time ago, and I failed. However, I still feel happy to own this piece of experience as I learned how to drive and finally, I can drive the car just by myself on the road. I feel so successful even if I failed the test in the end. In this case, the reason why I feel happy is not that I knew how to drive at the beginning, but I successed to try how to drive. This type of trying process is so precious for most successful people, I think.

In conclusion, due to the ways to fell successful, trying unknown and take risks is needed by most successful people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...appiness. To begin with, most people couldnt use their already resources to exchange...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, so, still, then, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37196765499 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34523963342 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504043126685 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8605545482 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3684210526 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217134029066 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689529144665 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548523953304 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118983961017 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372162729078 0.0645574589148 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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