The majority of people who are in their early to mid-twenties think that it is more important for people to study hard in school in order to success in a future job. They support that studying hard in school is the most important fact to evaluable people’s ability. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be thought about in a different light. I believe that in order to success in a future job, it is more important for people to have the ability to relate well to people. This is because it enables people to broaden their perspectives and relieve stress.
First of all, people’s ability to relate well to others enables them to broaden their perspectives. To be specific, the ability to relate well to people makes people to better understand other cultures, lifestyle, and build a quality life. As modern society is becoming increasingly, the globalized today’s world requires people with a strong understanding of international views. People can do this better by relating well to others. To illustrate, Steve Jobs, who is the founder of Apple, made great accomplishments in his life time. I read online that he was successful because he was global minded and culturally sensitive. He did this by keeping good connection with people. This proves that in order to success in a future job, it is more important for people to have the ability to relate well to people because it enables people to broaden their perspectives.
Moreover, the important ability for people is to relate well to people, which enables them to relieve their stress and restore health. In other word, people are requires to have the ability relating well to people which enables them to maintain stress, maintain health. Stress is the main cause of disease, shorter life span, and dissatisfying life in general. As such, people in modern society have to find ways to reduce stress and stay healthy. For example, when I was in middle school, I have studied every time without playing with my friends. At that time, I did not have any hobby for myself. It was very stressful and difficult to survive that time. Even I had good grade, I could not enjoy a better quality of life. Through this experience, I learned that even studying hard is one fact which is important, the most important ability is to relate well to people because they could not relieve their stress if they kept going to study hard. Therefore, this shows that it is more important for people to have the ability to relate well to people in order to lead a healthy and fulfill life.
To sum up, I believe that it is more important for people to have the ability to relate well to people than study hard : helping them broaden perspectives and relieve stress. all things mentioned, it is my belief that the argument regarding this issue has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons I have mentioned above. Never should we forget that this issue may have a huge impact on our future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...pple, made great accomplishments in his life time. I read online that he was successful b...
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Line 4, column 175, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...roaden perspectives and relieve stress. all things mentioned, it is my belief that ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'in general', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207547169811 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.183533447684 0.158761421928 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0857632933105 0.0866891130778 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0600343053173 0.046263068375 130% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0720411663808 0.0685040099705 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.102915951973 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0308747855918 0.0351676179071 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61391672317 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.073756432247 0.0309702414327 238% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00171526586621 0.00188951952338 91% => OK
Determiners: 0.0668953687822 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0102915951973 0.0209618222197 49% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0102915951973 0.0139019557991 74% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2990.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 518.0 408.028673835 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7722007722 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366795366795 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.245173745174 0.251872472559 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.121621621622 0.174417080927 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0868725868726 0.112833075102 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61391672317 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409266409266 0.524397521467 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.7790316546 59.2087087015 79% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9230769231 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5420484805 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 120.699889404 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9230769231 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 44.4404514405 45.7405998639 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.08152173913 1.45489161554 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.514290844068 0.300154397459 171% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.167661685912 0.103427244359 162% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.151443424572 0.0752933317313 201% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.489548815139 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.211185828713 0.151897553556 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206422198265 0.114077575197 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148959414891 0.0781384742642 191% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.616013953304 0.336927656856 183% => Paragraphs have same ideas.
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0780851503402 0.067059652881 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.412075158606 0.210909579961 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761668443631 0.0618886996521 123% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.