Working is an essential part of every adult's life; they need work to support their family and contribute to their society and be respected by their community. Different aspects affect people's work that one should consider, such as time that is crucial for today's jobs. In today's world, it is critical to work quickly and risk making mistakes rather than work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. I'd like to elaborate my answer with two reasons.
First, rapid population growth causes strict rivalry over job offers and other resources. For instance, in Iran; the country that I live in, we had a massive population growth in 1981 until 1989. We have a general system of examination for those who graduate from high school in order to admission into universities that we call it Annual Konkoor. Evidence shows that between the years 2000 till 2015, the participants who took the Konkoor exams were rising as high as 1,500,000 a year for only 100,000 seats available in universities. Moreover, those who were admitted must have tried their best to graduate as fast as they could to gain job offers in a hard contest of their overpopulated generation. Based on the authorities reports, There are more than 8,000,000 unemployed in our society.
Let me explain by another example. I work as an Architect. I take the exam to acquire my professional architecture licensure three years after my graduation. When I passed the test and gained my licensure as an architecture inspector, there were at least 20,000 inspectors looking for jobs. Moreover, since two years ago, the construction ratio in Tehran, the city I live in, has dropped down to near zero because of the financial disaster.
Second, with the fast advances in technology, the competition grow still higher. As an example, with the expansion of the internet and its availability to masses, it is more crucial to satisfying customers demands. Companies need to work faster to satisfy their costumers and continue to work with them. Freelancers have to deliver projects so that they could maintain their reputation and receive more project offers. For instance, I was registered in Freelancer.com, an internet website that connects employers with employees. There was a vast crowd competing for each job, and they were offering their services for less amount of money and time to deliver to the consumers. In that situation, those who worked fast and reliable could prevail over other rivals.
To summarize, with the super fast rate of population growth in societies, and the fast pace of technological advances, people must compete for each other in short amount of time to excel from other rivals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
Working is an essential part of every adults life; they need work to support their f...
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Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...d make sure that everything is correct. Id like to elaborate my answer with two re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, second, so, still, at least, for instance, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05882352941 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74635659744 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567873303167 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9262365403 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2173913043 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173382558423 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578266204482 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108005633089 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100585788346 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116260096299 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.