I certainly do not agree with a part time work for children. Somebody can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, a part time job should waste children’s time. These days, all people experience a huge advancement and improvement in different fields of technology or science including transportation, communication, health caring, or even artificial intelligence. In fact, in this modern world the most crucial factor that can prepare children for adult life is to study enough hard to either move or be up to date with new inventions and progress. A part time job perhaps not only takes youngster’s time and energy but also brings children's attentions away from school tasks or assignments.
Furthermore, avoiding form physical and psychological problems is another noticeable reason. A part time job forces teenagers to concentrate and do their tasks as good as possible. In this case, children should feel pressure, anxiety, or hopeless. Based on a research study, which has been carried out in Human Science department of Utah University in 2016, the jobs’ tension and stress would cause unpredictable and significant harms on children such as chronic daily headache, backache, heart palpitation, and hypertension. So this work not only does not prepare young people for future but also prevents them from a healthy lifestyle.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that if children have a part time job, they can earn more money. Chiefly, having a part time profession like car washing, home cleaning, or even electrical tool maintenance can help children to make a lot of money for future life. However, still I affirm that taking a part time vocation is not an ideal way. Although teenagers can make money, but part time careers usually are not paid too much and there is no any grantee that this money will be saved for future. In addition, children will earn more money by a full time job in future.
Due to aforementioned ground, I think that all parents should bear in mind that taking a part time job is not an appropriate way to make ready children for future. Participation of time and healthiness are two prime and conspicuous supports.
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Essay evaluation report
So this work not only does not prepare young people for future but also prevents them from a healthy lifestyle.
Description: don't use 'not only..not...'. You can use 'neither...nor' or 'either...or'
Although teenagers can make money, but part time
Description: don't put 'although' 'but' in one sentence.
flaws:
Don't use 'not only...but also' a lot of times in one essay.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1809 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.902 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.812 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.805 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thanks to Testbig team.
Thanks to Testbig team.
Please let me know which of them is correct? "part-time or part time".
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About "not only ... not....". Do you mean that we can not use negative sentence with NOT ONLY ?
No, we don't use it in that
No, we don't use it in that way. It is hard to read.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
I certainly do not agree with a part time work for children. Somebody can conscio...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 12, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...planations go as follows. Firstly, a part time job should waste children's time. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ate with new inventions and progress. A part time job perhaps not only takes youngster&ap...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...way from school tasks or assignments. Furthermore, avoiding form physical and ...
^^^
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...roblems is another noticeable reason. A part time job forces teenagers to concentrate and...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... one who argues that if children have a part time job, they can earn more money. Chiefly,...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... can earn more money. Chiefly, having a part time profession like car washing, home clean...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
.... However, still I affirm that taking a part time vocation is not an ideal way. Although ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 409, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... Although teenagers can make money, but part time careers usually are not paid too much a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 470, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ally are not paid too much and there is no any grantee that this money will be sav...
^^
Line 7, column 575, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ion, children will earn more money by a full time job in future. Due to aforementioned...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 589, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...will earn more money by a full time job in future. Due to aforementioned ground, I thi...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...rents should bear in mind that taking a part time job is not an appropriate way to make r...
^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.309692671395 0.229887763892 135% => OK
Verbs: 0.120567375887 0.158761421928 76% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0898345153664 0.0866891130778 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0661938534279 0.046263068375 143% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0141843971631 0.0685040099705 21% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.0945626477541 0.118717715034 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0260047281324 0.0351676179071 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00347059723 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.016548463357 0.0309702414327 53% => OK
Particles: 0.00236406619385 0.00188951952338 125% => OK
Determiners: 0.0756501182033 0.0887237588012 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0260047281324 0.0209618222197 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00709219858156 0.0139019557991 51% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2251.0 2387.08602151 94% => OK
No of words: 369.0 408.028673835 90% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10027100271 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.327913279133 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.257452574526 0.251872472559 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20054200542 0.174417080927 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.143631436314 0.112833075102 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00347059723 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607046070461 0.524397521467 116% => OK
Word variations: 72.909410866 59.2087087015 123% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.4210526316 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5985124114 48.84282405 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.473684211 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.684210526316 0.644075263715 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.54480286738 234% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.1663100842 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 2.14117647059 1.45489161554 147% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349768305088 0.300154397459 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.051282687832 0.103427244359 50% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0572103900118 0.0752933317313 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.470140024771 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125559540555 0.151897553556 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117190868758 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622672186123 0.0781384742642 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.254595539382 0.336927656856 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.078485778718 0.067059652881 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223007429499 0.210909579961 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357181704873 0.0618886996521 58% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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