There has been much discussion around the topic of whether teenagers should take a part-time job during the school or not. One group pf people believe that it’s important for children to understand the value of money and to prepare themselves for the reality of grownups’ life. On the other hand, others supposed that quality preparation for the exams and intense studying is a key point in the future success of a child. Speaking personally, I will concur that taking a part-time job is an experience with an enormous importance for a child, so to say, It is as a ticket to his bright future. I will explain my position by providing some examples to support my point of view.
First of all, by getting a part-time job in the interesting field a student can get acquainted with the specific of it and, more importantly, gain valuable connections with different people. For example, one of my friends decided to take a part-time job in the software engineering company, because he was into the different stuff, connected with computers in general. His duties were easy and effortless, he mostly was doing different office work. However, this experience brings him a lot of benefit, because he was able to see inside of the company work and got an invitation to apply to the opened job vacancy for the next year.
Secondly, part-time job also makes students more independent, because they have extra money. On the one hand, students are able to save money to pay for their college education or they can pack their bags and go travelling around the world. In other words, working students don’t depend on their parents’ money and can do whatever they want. it is not just a kind of a freedom for them, but also makes them aware of the money’s value. In addition, if students understand how to spend money properly, they won’t blow them on wind by making undeliberate purchases in the future.
To wrap up, I daresay that parents should do their best to adapt and prepare teenagers to the future. And one of the best way to do this is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
...s; money and can do whatever they want. it is not just a kind of a freedom for the...
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Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...do whatever they want. it is not just a kind of a freedom for them, but also makes them a...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
...ver they want. it is not just a kind of a freedom for them, but also makes them aware of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, in general, kind of, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77049180328 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7325300393 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551912568306 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.251633952 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.125 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302186628594 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105210717841 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836036948752 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207774038744 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960954105862 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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