I believe that having a part time job has a lot of advantageous for young children. First of all, children can make their own money. Second, they can improve their abilities, and third, they have this chance to learn team working. Thus, working out of the house can be very useful for teenage children.
Having part-time jobs enables children to make money. Nowadays, parents have to work a lot in order to provide a better life for their kids. I believe if parents encourage their children to have job, they will be able to take care of some of their own expenditures. For example, last year I had a part-time job on campus. I was working in the library. The money I got from this job enabled me to pay my cell phone bills and buy some cloth.
Children can improve their abilities by working out of the house. I believe if children work from young ages, they can earn a lot of experiences which is worth a lot. As a result, they can use these abilities in order to find a good job in the future. At my job last year I learned how to arrange books, use the properly, and provide suitable information to others.
children can also learn team working as a result of small jobs. one of the most important aspects of having part-time jobs for children is that they learn how to work with other people. In the past, most jobs used to be performed individually, whereas today almost any activity requires a team. Children who learn team work as young ages have better chances to work with others as a team.
In conclusion, although many people may disagree with working teenage children out side the house, I think that its advantageous overweight its disadvantageous. Children can be independent and make their own money by working out. Also, they have the opportunity to improve their abilities and use them in order to find better jobs in the future. Besides, they can learn how to work as a team with other people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
I believe that having a part time job has a lot of advantageous for young...
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Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...d third, they have this chance to learn team working. Thus, working out of the house...
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Line 2, column 195, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...arents encourage their children to have job, they will be able to take care of some...
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Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s by working out of the house. I believe if children work from young ages, they c...
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Line 4, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...ovide suitable information to others. children can also learn team working as a result...
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Line 4, column 26, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...on to others. children can also learn team working as a result of small jobs. one ...
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Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
...team working as a result of small jobs. one of the most important aspects of having...
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Line 4, column 315, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...ity requires a team. Children who learn team work as young ages have better chances ...
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Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: OUT_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
... disagree with working teenage children out side the house, I think that its advantageou...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'thus', 'whereas', 'as to', 'for example', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240932642487 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.170984455959 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0777202072539 0.0866891130778 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.020725388601 0.046263068375 45% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0777202072539 0.0685040099705 113% => OK
Prepositions: 0.124352331606 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0310880829016 0.0351676179071 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50340574593 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0414507772021 0.0309702414327 134% => OK
Particles: 0.00518134715026 0.00188951952338 274% => OK
Determiners: 0.0777202072539 0.0887237588012 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0284974093264 0.0209618222197 136% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0129533678756 0.0139019557991 93% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1919.0 2387.08602151 80% => OK
No of words: 346.0 408.028673835 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54624277457 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.277456647399 0.338922669872 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.222543352601 0.251872472559 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.127167630058 0.174417080927 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0722543352601 0.112833075102 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50340574593 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450867052023 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.7703507332 59.2087087015 77% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.7272727273 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.5657622516 48.84282405 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2272727273 120.699889404 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7272727273 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.644075263715 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 37.9816079874 45.7405998639 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.47115384615 1.45489161554 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363206606844 0.300154397459 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0830115159569 0.103427244359 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0571034657359 0.0752933317313 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.470847590371 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0973084838985 0.151897553556 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133166978358 0.114077575197 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052914989133 0.0781384742642 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349912939467 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0393279582374 0.067059652881 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249626882724 0.210909579961 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367347764428 0.0618886996521 59% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 9.0 2.75985663082 326% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.