TPO 25
In general, the statement is one of the major consideration of people including my family members. Some may holds the view that teenagers do not need a part time work in order to be successful one in the future. I, however, after thinking about the direction, decided to stand up in contrast with this view. I guess providing following reasons to support my perspective is crucial.
The first important factor which comes to mind is that in this way children learn how to save money. Since teenagers during a part-time job face with a lot of difficulties to earn money, they know the value of their wage. It is clear that they try to spend less money in order to buy unnecessary things. I think that a small example can give some light. Imagine a boy who is a seller next to his father. It would seem to me that he feels more responsibility toward his earning money. Moreover, he does not purchase unessential things like extra cloth.
Another significant reason involved in this issue in that these persons may be independent one earlier than others. Due to the fact that a person starts to work earlier, he makes his own money earlier, too. Therefore, such a teenage is a person who can get married as soon as possible. In my point of view, taking a job by a youngster plays unavoidable role during his future responsibility. I guess that there is not a better example that my brother as a person who started to work when he was 14. Now, he is just 22 and he has his own house and job. In addition, he got married some years ago.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by groups of persons who argue that a person doesn't need find a part-time job to be a successful one during adult life. First of all, they believe that our life completely is affected by education. Therefore, parents should focus just on children's education system and some other activities such as sport, art. However, still I confirm that taking a job by a teenage is more effective than education for adult life. For example, a young person who touch a lot of problems during work times know more than a child who just study theoretically.
In sum, from above mentioned significant causes, reaching the conclusion that having part-time job for teenagers improve their future life, is marked.
- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. 86
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do. 56
- the ability to the future job is related to relations 84
- On of the best ways that parents that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job 76
- In today's world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...s the view that teenagers do not need a part time work in order to be successful one in t...
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Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...son involved in this issue in that these persons may be independent one earlier t...
^^
Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...oups of persons who argue that a person doesnt need find a part-time job to be a succe...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'for example', 'i guess', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in general', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216517857143 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.162946428571 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0825892857143 0.0866891130778 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0513392857143 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0669642857143 0.0685040099705 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131696428571 0.118717715034 111% => OK
Participles: 0.03125 0.0351676179071 89% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67822298368 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.03125 0.0309702414327 101% => OK
Particles: 0.00223214285714 0.00188951952338 118% => OK
Determiners: 0.09375 0.0887237588012 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0133928571429 0.0209618222197 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0200892857143 0.0139019557991 145% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2280.0 2387.08602151 96% => OK
No of words: 403.0 408.028673835 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65756823821 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.295285359801 0.338922669872 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213399503722 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146401985112 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106699751861 0.112833075102 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67822298368 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553349875931 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 63.7658633047 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.7916666667 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0263483831 48.84282405 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 120.699889404 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7916666667 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 38.1316170389 45.7405998639 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.34920634921 1.45489161554 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0748331579549 0.103427244359 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0542655508816 0.0752933317313 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.447579464023 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164236218145 0.151897553556 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.255702718789 0.336927656856 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0717645534968 0.067059652881 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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