It is no doubt that nowadays people have aware of the importance of communities which are crucial for the society. However, most people argue that people are too busy to help communities. I totally agree with the point, especially when the heavy burden of study and the Internet are concerned.
To begin with, young people have to pay attention on study causing them no time to spare time on communities. Because in the modern world, it is impossible to own a good job without at least a bachelor’s degree. Unlike young people now, people in the past never care about their study. For example, when Jobs dropped out of university forty years ago, he did not need to care about his future. On the contrary, he had enough time to do what he wanted and he could spare lots of time to help communities. But for young students now, they concentrated all the time on study until they get a job.
Moreover, the Internet has taken up most of young people’s free time. Due to the highly developed technology, people can use various ways to waste their time such as smart phones, computers and laptops. They can communicate with friends, look for news and play games wherever they want. Comparing with helping communities, they do not need to pay attention and waste lots of time. And according to a research by the Peking University, students waste most of their free time on smart phones unlike thirty years ago when young often did communities together. So there is no wonder that young do not have time to do communities.
Admittedly, some young indeed help their communities according to regulations of some schools. These schools have aware of this situation and they force students to engage in community service during vacations. However, the time is still not enough and in fact most students pay no attention on communities.
For the aforementioned ground, although some students are committed to community service due to the policy of the school, I firmly believe young people nowadays do not give enough time to help with their community services.
- TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the young') or simply say ''most young''.
Suggestion: most of the young; most young
... Moreover, the Internet has taken up most of young people's free time. Due to the hig...
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Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...nd waste lots of time. And according to a research by the Peking University, students wast...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, look, moreover, so, still, at least, for example, in fact, no doubt, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89204545455 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67728816171 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494318181818 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4237905877 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6315789474 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5263157895 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272482018832 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956066820889 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072128235391 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170143514908 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517955960398 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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