Taking into account the fact that the young people spent most of time on study or work, I agree that some young people nowadays fail to spare enough time for community service.But due to the policy of some high schools and universities that students are required to serve the community, the improved community is attributed to the efforts of some young people.
To begin with, for some university students, the community service gives way to the study.University students have to work hard enough in a bid to guarantee high GPA which would benefit them in the long run if they decide to pursue further education or lucrative career.Take medical students for example. Overwhelmed by subjects ranging from basic biomedical science to molecular immunology, students have to deal with assignments and laboratory reports following the courses. Obviously, they invest more time on solving academic problems than on addressing community issues.
Secondly, for some young employees, community service gives way to the work. On one hand, the work schedule is tight for staffs at their twenties. Chances are high that they are required to work for additional hours partly because young people are at the disposal of the superordinate. On the other hand, some young employees give priority to earning money so as to feed themselves and parents. In this case, the burden of feeding the whole family drives them to be preoccupied with work rather than the community service. As a result, the more time they spend handling the paperwork or answering the telephone at the company, the less time they spend refurbishing the neighbor’s house or clearing up the streets at the community.
However, some young people indeed help their communities because a number of high schools and universities mandate that young undergraduates should be engaged in community service during each winter or summer vacation. In some high schools, for example, one of requirement for receiving a diploma is that students must fulfill two hundred hours of community service. Besides, many colleges make community service an unofficial requirement for admission. For this reason, young people are able to play different roles in building a better community and conferring benefits to residents by writing newsletters, organizing art events or working at local clinics.
To sum up, although I concede that some students are committed to community service due to the policy of the school, there are some factors, I think, holding young people back from devoting sufficient time to helping their communities.
- TPO-42 - Independent Writing Task Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 40
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- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, i think, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2895377129 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83752545802 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532846715328 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.6548378634 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.933333333 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145160767931 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536541580682 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373554643952 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968496202369 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261233753222 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 10.002688172 300% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 30.0 10.247311828 293% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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