People are living in a modern society with a rapid rhythm of life. It seems to me that people are always in a hurry to do things or to realize their dreams. Therefore, people concern about the question of whether or not young people nowadays give enough time to support their publics. Some people may agree that young people do not contribute their time to the help of their societies. However, others would disagree with them. In my opinion, I strongly believe that young people assist their communities in many ways. They do spend their time for the need of their societies. I feel this ways for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, young people participate in the organization of armies to protect their countries. Have you ever visit an army department? Do you know how many soldiers in your country? Who they are? Are they young, medium or old people? I do not know about the requirement to enter the army in other countries, but in my country, Vietnam, every province need to have an army department. All soldiers are young people. They work day and night in severe environments to protect my country, Vietnam. This point demonstrates that young people use their youthful energy to help their communities.
Secondly, young people help to increase the economy of their communities. Do you think young people or old people work more effectively? The answer is probably young people. Do you know why? Obviously, young people have more energy to do their jobs. Because they are full of energy, they can work faster than old people. In fact, there are a numbers of young people working in various jobs. Many of them have high degree in different fields, such as technology, medicine and astronomy, and etc. They contribute their potential and knowledge to develop our societies and make our lives more and more convenient and prosperous day by day.
In conclusion, people have different idea about the issue of whether young people spend enough time to help their communities. In my view, young people play a pivotal role for the development of their societies. They not only contribute their abilities to benefit their communities, but they also use their youthful energy to protect their countries from enemies in the battles.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...dreams. Therefore, people concern about the question of whether or not young people nowadays give enoug...
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Line 1, column 585, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...for the need of their societies. I feel this ways for two reasons, which I will expl...
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Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... as technology, medicine and astronomy, and etc. They contribute their potential and kn...
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Line 3, column 495, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nology, medicine and astronomy, and etc. They contribute their potential and know...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as, you know, first of all, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88860103627 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55292314317 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479274611399 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3113224991 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.0689655172 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3103448276 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.48275862069 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340335122179 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107579023044 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803044447627 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230698462799 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671409228468 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.19 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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