The job provides us with money which helps people to live without any pressure. Some people believe that the child should choose the job that is identical for their parent's. Nevertheless, others think the children pick jobs that are different from their parent's job. From my point of view, it is far better to follow their own passion when choosing a job will lead the children into success. I will explore the reasons why I disagree with it for the following essay.
To begin with, children have more job option to choose than their parents have because of this changing world. People creating many new job positions such as Youtuber, Bloggers and so on. Also, now females can become a pilot which is not eligible in the past. Nonetheless, some job positions are disappearing day by day and some turn into new ones in order to fit with society. For example, when my mother was a child, there are many bootmakers working in her town. However, now, there is only a few bootmakers exist in this society because of the boots and shoes of foreign brands.
Another reason is, choosing a job with their favor is important for to be successful in the future. Only when people have an interest in something, they come with an effort and hard work. Also, I think the interest assist more the person more than most parents do. From my personal experience, I choose to work as a material scientist even though both my parents are teachers. I know how hard to do a not familiar job, but it appeals to me more than anything. When I try to teach children it does not attract me. So, I cannot concentrate on it which is the main struggle of being an expert.
All in all, the world is changing which gives more opportunity for children to choose the major they love. Furthermore, the children are a different individual from their parents. So, they need to pick things with their favor.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ut it appeals to me more than anything. When I try to teach children it does not att...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, for example, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61194029851 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41871370479 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54328358209 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.4111925189 48.9658058833 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.5714285714 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9523809524 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406496156095 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120951348169 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105887444858 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257465783839 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118498404186 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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