Job is one of the prime parts of our life, it influences our life a lot, and we spend almost half of our life time by doing it. So, the decision of choosing parents' jobs as own career is a tough decision. Even though many people like to go through the same path in which his/ her parents went in the past, I would not like to do a job which is defined from my family members' living hood. I feel this way for two most important reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, parents' career might not be the same as people want to do. Since everyone has own specific qualification, so he could not be matched with his family members' jobs. You will show that many like to be a doctor and eventually become a great doctor because of his or her passion to become a doctor, but what if he or she just choose the one which his/her parents do. It is obvious that he/ she never able to hope to be what he really want because of the binding for his family job. My own experience is the compelling example of this. I was born at a remote village, and my father was a farmer. But he never want to make us like he was. So, he sent us school even in financial crisis. However, my elder brother did not like to study and he like to become a farmer like my father; as a result, he also passed his life by doing the same activity what my father did. On the other hand, we four sibling worked hard and changed our condition and become what we wanted. Therefore, father job was not good for the children in all time.
Secondly, if we do our parents' jobs, this world will be the same and will not change at all. There are many people who like to do the work which his father did because he want to earn money in illegal way. For example, one of my villager went to university to finish his higher education. But, he did a lot of wrong things in the university. He stollen many electric device from the dormitory. He did this because his father was a thief. Like this way, many just choose the easiest way to get job. Therefore, they joined parents business. Linkan, my university friend, who want to back to our country from America because he want to continue his father's business.
Finally, parents' jobs are boring job. You will find your father job is the worst job in the world because of similarity of activities. I remember my father activity, he used to awoke up early in the morning, and then he went to the field after taking some dried fruits. He did the same things in each day, and all of this activity was related to field, so I did not like to do this. I aspired by one civil engineer who visited my village for completing surviving. I asked him, how he became an engineer, he cleared my by saying that I needed to study hard. Then I worked hard and did well in the exam, and then gradually I climbed my destination. All of those would not possible if I just did my father farming.
In conclusion, it is clear from the discussion that people should not select their living hood only because of his or her parents do that job. It is because people will enjoy their life by doing the job what he really want to do, and because it will not struck him in one point.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
... a lot, and we spend almost half of our life time by doing it. So, the decision of choosi...
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Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...never able to hope to be what he really want because of the binding for his family j...
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Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...nd my father was a farmer. But he never want to make us like he was. So, he sent us ...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...he work which his father did because he want to earn money in illegal way. For examp...
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Line 5, column 626, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... to our country from America because he want to continue his fathers business. ...
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Line 5, column 665, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... want to continue his fathers business. Finally, parents jobs are boring job. Yo...
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Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...ir life by doing the job what he really want to do, and because it will not struck h...
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Line 9, column 255, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'strike'
Suggestion: strike
...lly want to do, and because it will not struck him in one point.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 101.0 43.0788530466 234% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2577.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 612.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.21078431373 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97379470361 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21924721564 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434640522876 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6050906022 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7941176471 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08823529412 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169642401821 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598897121212 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830726852275 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128599101476 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04048103391 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.84 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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