I disagree with the statement about whether people should take opportunity to get a secure job or wait for the one more satisfying because if the definition of secure is stable job such as non concerning of bankrupt and good salary, I would say that it is not a good job for me. The following three reasons support my opinion.
First of all, I would like to have a job which makes me feel that I am skilled and talented enough to work in that field. For example, I worked on newspaper company as internship however I was not comfortable there because I had no knowledge about journalism and I always had problem to interview people. People should consider the jobs which are suit your self. If I study about web design in a college for four years, I might built some connection to the web development subject. Even though, If I do not use it those background, I would waste my studies. Thus, I would think that people should try to find a job which is the place you could use your knowledge and make you feel smart, comfortable and satisfied.
Second, the company usually hire people who are motivated to work for them so employee are supposed to be productive, creative and positive to make new things. Moreover, if you show your effort to your boss, you could be promoted to next level of your career. For instance, if the job is secure such as stable and no worry to get fired, you could be a lazy worker. On the other hand, if you work at developing venture company, you find interest every single day and it could led you to be the pioneer in your work field. As I stated above, people should be more effectively and sensitive to work.
Lastly, for personal reasons, I would like to have great work-life balance. We usually work for eight or 10 hours each day so it is almost two third of your day. As long as we spend time at office or with colleagues, I really need have time to take a rest. For example, as a part of Japanese culture, drinking with your boss is sort of your work. Therefore, even you are exhausted, you are supposed to have dinner together and try to share your life. According to the Japanese research, there are many young people quitting their job because they do not prefer to spend time with teammates outside of company and try to look for the place to work without private activity. Many people try to find a job which they do not need to go out after work. They do not care about if the company is stable or not.
All of considered, I do not like the proposal that people should involve to the secure job more than satisfaction.
- TPO-05 - Integrated Writing Task As early as the twelfth century A.D., the settlements of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest were notable for their "great houses," massive stone buildings that contain hundreds of rooms and often stand th 88
- TPO-18 - Integrated Writing Task In the 1950s Torreya taxifoha, a type of evergreen tree once very common in the state of Florida, started to die out. No one is sure exactly what caused the decline, but chances are good that if nothing is done, Torreya wi 88
- In 1939 David O Selznick produced a film of Margaret Mitchell s Pulitzer Prize winning novel Gone with the Wind The movie proved to be among the most important in the history of world cinema To this day in fact it remains the American box office c 90
- TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem 73
- Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why? 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 476, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
... interest every single day and it could led you to be the pioneer in your work fiel...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, look, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, third, thus, for example, for instance, sort of, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40756302521 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42251214096 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466386554622 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6622785753 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3636363636 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326271993723 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997118453813 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739342741505 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215886576857 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748759462287 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.