In today's world, having a good job is everyone's aim because it will have a good impression on people's life. As far as I am concerned, there are two different ideas about this question. Some people believe that secure job will satisfy everyone's expectations about the job and they should accept this kind of job offers. While, others believe otherwise. I subscribe to the latter one, and there are several reasons to name. Three of which—that is—more motivation, higher income, and more security, are the most conspicuous ones.
The most important point for my advocating is that motivation plays an important role in everyone's success. In a career which is secure but not motivating, people will not reach success because they do not tend to spend their time to improve the quality of their performance in the job. The motivating job provides a situation for everyone to enjoy their career, and to try so hard to progress as fast as possible. In this way, people can compensate the time they have waited for this motivating career. One of my friends, after graduation, has waited a long period to obtain his favorite job. I can remember that he has almost become depressed. Eventually, he got it, and now he is happy and so motivated to raise his grade in his career.
The second reason that comes to mind is that income is one of the key factors in career selection. People tend to select a job which has the higher income because the money can make life easier for them. They can have their favorite house and buy luxury things. My cousin whose children are at school age has not had a job since 3 years ago. 2 years ago, he was invited to an interview for a job which income was not high enough to handle a family. He refused to accept their invitation. One year later, he found a job with high income. It changed his life completely. He calculated recently that if he would accept the first job, he should work 5 months to have income equal to the latter one in a month.
Last but not least, job security is provided by workers. By this, I mean someone who wants to be on his or her own career, should try hard enough to not to lose it. Companies tend to retain employees who are hard working. On the other hand, even in a secure job, if someone works lazily, he or she will be hired. I can remember that my uncle was hired by a company, which promised him to support him for his whole life because he was so late in the morning.
Admittedly, on the other hand, some people prefer to get a secure job due to financial problems that many companies face, they have to dismiss some of their employees each year to get rid of a part of their troubles, and as a consequence, individuals who work for these companies are at risk of getting fired. For example, my brother got his engineering degree five years ago and got hired by a big computer monitor producing company. After about two years working there, he was fired along with several other workers. He was jobless for about six months and finally decided to work for himself rather than working for others and being in danger of getting fired. At present, he owns a supermarket and his income is considerable. Although he is not completely content with it, he feels secure. Therefore, as this example shows, security is the number one issue that most employees face.
All in all, to sum up, what I've outlined above, motivation, income, and security are key factors for everyone who wants to select a career. These factors can bring someone to a situation which can be more satisfied with his or her own life due to higher income and the motivation helps to get success.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The content doesn't match the topic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 36 15
No. of Words: 659 350
No. of Characters: 2893 1500
No. of Different Words: 285 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.067 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.39 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.357 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.306 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.568 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.257 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.404 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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In todays world, having a good job is ev...
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...rity, are the most conspicuous ones. The most important point for my advocati...
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...ed to raise his grade in his career. The second reason that comes to mind is ...
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...cause he was so late in the morning. Admittedly, on the other hand, some peop...
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...one issue that most employees face. All in all, to sum up, what Ive outlined...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'i mean', 'kind of', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20218579235 0.229887763892 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.169398907104 0.158761421928 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0792349726776 0.0866891130778 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0532786885246 0.046263068375 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0806010928962 0.0685040099705 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105191256831 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0300546448087 0.0351676179071 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.46982081781 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.042349726776 0.0309702414327 137% => OK
Particles: 0.00136612021858 0.00188951952338 72% => OK
Determiners: 0.0765027322404 0.0887237588012 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0204918032787 0.0209618222197 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0191256830601 0.0139019557991 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3675.0 2387.08602151 154% => OK
No of words: 656.0 408.028673835 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60213414634 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06087906887 4.48200974243 113% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.310975609756 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.207317073171 0.251872472559 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.131097560976 0.174417080927 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0853658536585 0.112833075102 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46982081781 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452743902439 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.2711000667 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6684587814 174% => OK
Sentence length: 18.2222222222 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7690546847 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.083333333 120.699889404 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.361111111111 0.644075263715 56% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 38.9539295393 45.7405998639 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.11261261261 1.45489161554 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294044443326 0.300154397459 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0843455921883 0.103427244359 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0612464496556 0.0752933317313 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.401683795152 0.497263757937 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154055923208 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874346140439 0.114077575197 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582156078092 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.331208241968 0.336927656856 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0850860368905 0.067059652881 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191979195034 0.210909579961 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313298586816 0.0618886996521 51% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.75985663082 290% => OK
Total topic words: 25.0 13.6433691756 183% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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