TPO 27 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying Use specific reasons and ex

The pandemic has impacted numerous companies since the outbreak of corona virus, and a lot of people had lost their jobs. It has been quite difficult for worker to find a job recently. As a result, people are asking should we waiting for better job options than compromising on something else. In my opinion, people should grab the job offer if we have an opportunity to do so.

First of all, a secure job can support ourselves financially. When I was searching for my first job after I graduated from the university, I was dreaming to get into a company that my peers would be envy at. As a result, it took me for almost three months on searching a job with no outcome. Unfortunately, I didn’t have any deposit, since my parents had to give me allowance. Not having income increased my anxiety level which is psychologically unhealthy to keep waiting for a satisfying job.

Secondly, doing something is better than not doing anything. Because of the above reason, I got a job even though I wasn’t really satisfied about it. However, my leader at work was professional in the field which was an awesome senior colleague to learning from. At the end, I worked there for 3 years, and it was a really good experience in my life. That is to say, we can’t realize whether the job would be satisfying before we really get into it.

Last but not least, we could still get our dream job while we are having a relatively not satisfying job. We could be rejected by companies for several reasons, for example, the job market is saturated or we are not eligible for the offer. As we can see, most of the problems can’t be solve immediately. I suggest that people can compromise on one job, and to enhance our working ability at the same time. Once the opportunity appeared, we can get rid of the job we are doing now, and be the first priority to get the new one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... we can’t realize whether the job would be satisfying before we really get into it. Last b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52212389381 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66221533093 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545722713864 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.1869450375 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.6842105263 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8421052632 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277729540717 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980438840154 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556293270092 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183509037922 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029903550793 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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