Living a modern life is different nowadays than the life in the past. I disagree with the statement, parents today are more involved in their kid's education. Because parents need to work more than the earlier's years and they spend more time doing something that was not used to do in the past.
First of all, things are more expensive than in the past, for example, natural food, transportation, housing and because of this wives need to work integrally. In the past was normal that mommies teach their kids in the house after school furthermore sometimes she could go to school to talk with the teachers to figure out how the children were studying there. Today because of the price raised a lot, they need to work making money for this demand. The professors, brothers or another person are doing this supervision actions, in fact, parents only know the results. When I was a child, my mother did not work and she always helped me with my homework and when I was studying for any test. On the other hand, my wife is working to help me with our house bills and my son Felipe, he is 6 years old, the person that helps him is my other daughter Maria Clara, she is 14 years old and she is able to do this. At the end of the day if Maria Clara had some problem she says to me and we solve together.
Second, some people are parents early without finished their studies and they need to study at the same time as the children, in the past, if this happened, one of them, the father or the mother stopped to studying. Because of this, they are not able to be involved in their children's education. Some cases like this, parents are used to leaving their kids all day at the school. They received a report from the school telling how the kid was studying there. This kind of schools are very normal in Brazil, we call this, full-time school. These schools are supporting by the government and they need to send the kids score every semester to the regulations sector. In addition, this program does extra courses outside of school, for example, sports excursions, visit to museums and other cultural things.
In conclusion, at the present time, things are more demanding for the parents than in the past. Maybe they are not able to see how their children's are in the school, but there are a lot of things that can replace this lack of monitoring,
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... transportation, housing and because of this wives need to work integrally. In the p...
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Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regulations'' or 'regulation's'?
Suggestion: regulations'; regulation's
...nd the kids score every semester to the regulations sector. In addition, this program does ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50819672131 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29473065227 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489461358314 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7607895637 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.315789474 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183718639287 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073636424345 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830327398024 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154546837704 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922037337418 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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