TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, quality of education is of paramount importance not only for the encouragement of young people to enroll at the university, but also for establishing a reputation for the university. This brings up a highly controversial topic whether the university can improve his quality of education by dedicating more salary to professors or not. I believe that it is much more advantageous for colleges if college managers consider to supply laboratory equipment and recruit tutors for young people. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the money is required for expanding university facilities and laboratory. In fact, most universities around the world have a few laboratory equipment and if university administrations consider renovating the afterward facilities, quality of education, especially in the experimental courses, will increase substantially. Therefore, students will learn better. My own experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. When I was an engineering student at one of the recognized university in my country, I registered for the one of practical course. The laboratory for this course did not have sufficient equipment and even some of them was broken. Although we did not learn practical knowledge in the first session, the university decided to purchase new equipment for the rest of term. Hence, after investing money in expanding university's equipment, we comprehended class discussion completely, which, in turn, resulted in getting a high score at university examinations. Consequently, improving laboratory equipment is beneficial for raising the caliber of education.
The second point worth discussing is related to taking tutors. In other words, offering private tutors for students without payment is a good plan to enhance the quality of education. Young adults in the university exams often have a lot of problems regarding class discussions and textbooks. Nevertheless, the university can solve their students’ problems if they employ tutors for the students who have difficulty in understanding theory described in the classes. For instance, take my friend's experience, he is a senior level student at a college. Last semester while I was talking with him, he told me that he needed a help for his exams. I recommended him to take a private tutor but he told me that he did not have enough money for paying for a tutor. My friend had not comprehended textbook theories before I decided to teach him voluntarily for the sake of preparing him for tests and thus he passed all of his college examinations with a high mark. Not only did he grasp the textbooks' information well but he received more satisfying grades in the tests. This example suffices to illustrate my point of dedicating money to taking tutors for free of charge. As a result of this, hiring a tutor for university student needing assistance in the final exams will be a useful proposal that could increase the standard of education in the university.
In conclusion according to above-mentioned factor, I contend that juveniles as well as universities will benefit more from education if the money is allocated to enhance facilities and hire more tutors instead of raising university professor's wages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
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Suggestion: textbooks'; textbook's
... a high mark. Not only did he grasp the textbooks information well but he received more s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, even so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2759.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31599229287 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17902259145 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514450867052 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 904.5 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1704548673 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.36 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.76 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136953002102 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463408007748 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426829873465 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960831955166 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287280028287 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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