Doctors, Engineers, actors are some of job in each society. Having a job is so important because many aspects of men's life related to this, so people should be chose it meticulously. in this regard, many people wonder where is more enjoyable to have a job. there are many points of view in this issue. One stands in this issue is that it is more enjoyable to have a job where people work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. As far as I'm concerned, I concur with this idea. In following statements, I will provide two reasons for my answer.
The first reason coming in my mind is that people who work only three days a week have more free time for spending with their household. therefore, it is more enjoyable for them because spending time with family members is so fun. they can do more entertainment than the second groups (people who work five days a week) cannot do. for example, they can travel the rest of week in which they don't work, because they have 4 days for resting that is too much so they can use this time for traveling while the second groups don't have enough time for traveling.
The Second, if ones work 3 days at the beginning days of a week other people can work at the rest of a week. therefore, in this society people can find job easily, so this country will be vivacious. In the contrast, if people don't have a job, they will be gloomy. For example, according to the reports of Iran Estatistic Worker ( IEW), the majority of people in Iran are jobless and the most of them are dismal ,so they attempt to suicide. Only fewer of them adapt themselves to this condition. IEW asserts that if they had jobs, they never killed themselves. Therefore, not only a person who work three days a week is happy, but also he provides opportunity for others to have a job and helps them to be happy.
All in all, having a job where people work 3 days a week for long hours are more enjoyable, because they can spend more time with their family member, and people can find job easily. Therefore, isn't it better to stop five days a week work?
- TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec 70
- TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec 65
- TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec 60
- TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co 60
- TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33333333333 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25798819478 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438596491228 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.165096633 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.45 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.95 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444684254097 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147584955562 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153463026782 0.0737576698707 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318479530281 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855092637484 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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