The world is changing a lot, with technology progress, so people should use to it.in my opinion, global changing is a good point to make human life easier, and much happier than before, such as, smart cellphones.
First, these changes, sometimes help the people, such as monitoring to protect people, for example, at 2005, at mid night, one of my neighbors called me, she said that; I stole her car on her office, and she want it now if I’ve not gave it back, she will kill me.in that time, I thought that she drank too much and I did not attention to her and hang out without continued the argue. after 3 days, in the afternoon I was not at home and the camera of controlled of traffic next to my house recorded that/ she came to my house without my allowed also, broke my window and she killed my cat and ran away. so I called the police and rescues of her to demand to arrested her too. The polices catches her very easily, but I just think about if we don’t have this technology, how the police would help me.
The second world changes are; the population of people get huge so humans destroyed every natural places also they killed almost of animals by protect themselves or hunting them to find their favorite meals. So all these changes are awful for popular of distinction animals or plants. For example, Amazon forest is the biggest famous forest but by hunting animals most of the marvelous breeds of parrots disappeared very easily unfortunately.
In summarize, some of these changes are useful and without them people have lots of problems, on the other hand some of them are dangerous for all creations, so people should think to get it better because these are terrified for humans too. I hope everything will get better in future with progress the technology.
- TPO-07 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
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- TPO-50 Integrated toefl writing 3
- If you could change one important thing about your country what would you change Use reasons and specific examples to support your answers 73
- TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... I stole her car on her office, and she want it now if I've not gave it back, s...
^^^^
Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...n to her and hang out without continued the argue. after 3 days, in the afternoon I was n...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...d hang out without continued the argue. after 3 days, in the afternoon I was not at h...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...dow and she killed my cat and ran away. so I called the police and rescues of her ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61755485893 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41709662797 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592476489028 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.3359523442 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.3 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109193478658 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478709563907 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464861782335 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0847515732804 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458436150146 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 10.247311828 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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