TPO 31 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Living in a peaceful world with a normal speed changes is a vital need for everyone to adopt the new circumstances. We need a specific time to accept each change in our life style and while we grow up it seems that our abilities to so this will be decline. Some people believe that people now feel less happy because, the world is changing so fast, while some may be disagree. In my point os view, these high-speed transforming are confuse many people so that many of us hold back of the progress in the technology world wich pull us behind itself. In the following paragraph it will be discusses more.
First of all, in this high-tech world which instantly provides everyone needs, there is not time to perceive the meaning of our attemtp role in our life. In this environment if anybody wants anything he search in the google and will find the answer. It provides a unique one-second satisfaction feeling which does not last long; finally after a short time it is so tiring and the bad feeling will remain behind that. For example, my nephew, a 22 year-old boy who study at university, he says that they can find every question's answer in a moment through internet. They find the answer, but they've not contact with a live body who can perceive them. This machinery life after a while will destroy their emotional behaviors. They did not learn how act with a human when they need to communicate. That is why I think this high-speed technological world can make a non-satisfying life for us.
Second, with this fast changing world, many people could not adopt the new technology and after a while they will be disappointed to keep up with their environment. For example my uncle explains that he has have so good memory with traditional telephones., and before the smart cellphone he called his children and was happy to speak with them. Unfortunately, he feels very bad these days, because he could not work with the new cellphone and their application to connect through the social medias which his children are interested. He complains that these ridiculous gadgets like cellphone separates each family members from each other. Even they are ain on room close to each other the new generation are using their cellphone for every things and it makes a big distance between them. overall, many new technological application bring a feasibility but get our happiness.
In conclusion, these high-speed transforming technological world does not guarente our happiness. It get our time and destroyed our communication. I think we should spend more time for our emotional feeling and think more about using technology in our personal environment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Living in a peaceful world with a normal...
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Suggestion: confused
...view, these high-speed transforming are confuse many people so that many of us hold bac...
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...paragraph it will be discusses more. First of all, in this high-tech world wh...
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Suggestion: searches
...nvironment if anybody wants anything he search in the google and will find the answer....
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...ll find the answer. It provides a unique one-second satisfaction feeling which do...
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...ong; finally after a short time it is so tiring and the bad feeling will remain b...
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...ugh internet. They find the answer, but theyve not contact with a live body who can pe...
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...can make a non-satisfying life for us. Second, with this fast changing wor...
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...r example my uncle explains that he has have so good memory with traditional telepho...
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...new generation are using their cellphone for every things and it makes a big dist...
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...d it makes a big distance between them. overall, many new technological application bri...
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...a feasibility but get our happiness. In conclusion, these high-speed transfor...
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...rld does not guarente our happiness. It get our time and destroyed our communicatio...
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...echnology in our personal environment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87389380531 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74822844995 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508849557522 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.923027929 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.136363636 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172767449979 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517878144079 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602753167666 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105402272505 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769266744575 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.