Nowadays the most of the decisions that have an impact on society are not influenced by young people. These decisions are getting based on the all of people necessities and whatever is the age, if it is important, it will have influence. There are my reasons to support my opinion.
First of all, education needs to be improved at the preschool and a young person will not have the intention to do this because they only will want something for they own benefit. The part of the population who think that children need to have a good education is the old people. They know that one thing which makes some society grow is a good education. In Brazil, we have some bad schools and a few good schools. These schools which are good, they are the military school and the militaries invest a lot of money in structure and professors. As a result, the best university students came from there, in fact not the best students but the best personalities from Brazil. If our militaries schools followed the young people influence, they will not spend money there.
Second, young people do not have the maturity to decide what is good or what is not good because they do not have experience as the old people have. Another thing is about the healthy, one thing that makes one society good is people living better and healthier, to achieve this we need to think in all of society, people with 0 years from old age need do some treatment and followed by a doctor regularly. My sister is a doctor and my father is 6 years old and even though she is young
she needs to think in my father when he has some problem. On the other hand, my son Felipe, he is 4 years and all the time when he goes to see a doctor he needs to receive a treatment relation for his age. All these actions are influenced in all ages.
As a conclusion, all the decisions are taken in thinking all ages, not only for young people. Sometimes is important to have good schools and good hospitals. The decisions are involving all the ages and this is important for the future of the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 95, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'Sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: Is Sometimes
...ng all ages, not only for young people. Sometimes is important to have good schools and good...
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Line 8, column 173, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...hools and good hospitals. The decisions are involving all the ages and this is important for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, another thing, in fact, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45358090186 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42315205486 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437665782493 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8748464371 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2777777778 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156458053568 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059668535116 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04824056012 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104531344287 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615014909658 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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